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Does renting a house have more advantanes or disadvantage? v.1

Does renting a house have more advantanes or disadvantage? v. 1
Selecting a place to live in and whether to rent it or own it is a big decision about any individual. People have decided according to their requirement in future. Half of the people wish to live in the rented house apart from buying it. This essay will highlight the pros, as well as, the cons of renting apartments. Is this a serious concern to live in the renting house? Everything depends on demand and necessary requirement. Almost 80% people of any country work at different locations, which is far away from their hometown, but they have to do their job as that place is perfect for companies or offices rather than staying there. Moreover, people have tried to save money for the future as nowadays property rates are at the peak and most of the people don't want to invest in them. For example, in India, people are career oriented and more focus on high salaries with balanced work culture. Almost every nation's population needed this atmosphere, but companies are located in various cities so people don't want to buy homes due to migration for their betterment. On the other hand, people who are from a wealthy background want to buy homes for the investment and earn a lump sump amount. They have only focused on areas where maximum number of commercial buildings available so they will easily rent out the homes and improve their profitability. In conclusion, both options are open in the market. It is an individual duty to perform for their benefits. According to me, buying a home where you want to live your life after retirement.
Selecting a place to
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live
in and whether to rent it or
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own
it is a
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big
decision about any individual.
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People
have decided according to their requirement
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in future
. Half of the
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people
wish to
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live
in the rented
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house
apart from buying it. This essay will highlight the pros,
as well
as, the cons of renting apartments. Is this a serious concern to
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live
in the renting
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house
?

Everything depends on demand and necessary requirement. Almost 80%
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people
of any country work at
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different
locations, which is far away from their hometown,
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but
they
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have to
do their job as that place is perfect for
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companies
or offices
rather
than staying there.
Moreover
,
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people
have tried to save money for the future as nowadays property rates are at the peak and most of the
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people
don't
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want
to invest in them.
For example
, in India,
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people
are career oriented and more focus on high salaries with balanced work culture. Almost every nation's population needed this atmosphere,
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but
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companies
are located
in various cities
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so
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people
don't
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want
to
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buy
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homes
due to migration for their betterment.

On the other hand
,
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people
who are from a wealthy background
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want
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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homes
for the investment and earn a lump sump amount. They have
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only
focused on areas where maximum number of commercial buildings available
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so
they will
easily
rent out the
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homes
and
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improve
their profitability.

In conclusion
, both options are open in the market. It is an individual duty to perform for their benefits.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
, buying a home where you
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want
to
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live
your life after retirement.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Does renting a house have more advantanes or disadvantage? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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