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Do you prefer to learn about the news in a newspaper or on television? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.2

Do you prefer to learn about the news in a newspaper or on television? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2
It is extremely important to be well informed about the facts and main discussions that occur in our society. In this sense, people have their ways to keep themselves informed and in general television and newspapers are the most important options to be in touch with the news. Personally, I prefer to read a newspaper in order to get informed since the informations are more complete and less biased then in the television. One might say that television is a better way to be in touch with the current news. It' s possible to watch television everywhere which makes easier for people to get informed. At the same time, the person who watches television might be tired and he just want to know the ways without make a lot of effort. In this way, TV News Programs are considered a good way to do this since television tries to transmit informations in a way that facilitates interpretation to the viewers. However, this approach that television has with the news results in a lack of profundity about the topics transmitted in the programs. Generally, the television is not able to transmit the complexity of the facts that occurred, but only the main points and facts about a certain news. For instance, many news programs talk about changes in the economic scenario of a country nevertheless the content within the information is very scarce and the viewer is able to only understand whether the economy of his country is in good shape or not. The viewer would not be able to understand the reasons why the economy of the country is on that situation. At the same time, a person that do not read and look for information only on the TV will have to consume the perspective made by the TV Network. In this sense, a person could have access only to a biased perspective about a subject and he would not have the tools to create his own perspective about it. If someone only get informed by watching Fox News or CNN News, this person probably would have a narrow perspective about the informations given since these network companies tend to have biased interpretations about the news. When a person decides to have access to newspaper, he is able to have more details about the facts since reading material tend to be more dense. Newspapers tend to demonstrate to its buyers that they have more quality than television news programs and they will always try to present them a plethora of facts that are involved in a certain news. Moreover, even considering that newspapers also might be biased, they tend to be more clear about their positions, for this reasons they have their editorials sector where the reader can have a clear position from that newspaper. At the same time, people who reader frequently tend to have a more developed critical sense. In conclusion, it' s possible to see that to learn about the news through a newspaper is a better option than the television. Newspapers allow us to know the informations with more profundity and also it' s a important tool to develop our critical sense toward the news and the people who talk about them.
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extremely
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important
to be well
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informed
about the facts and main discussions that occur in our society. In this sense,
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people
have their
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ways
to
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keep
themselves
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informed
and
in general
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television
and
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newspapers
are the most
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important
options to be in touch with the
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news
.
Personally
, I prefer to read a
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newspaper
in order to
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get
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informed
since the
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informations
are more complete and less
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biased
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then
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in the television
.

One might say that
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television
is a better
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way
to be in touch with the
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current
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news
.
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watch
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television
everywhere which
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makes
easier for
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people
to
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get
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informed
. At the same time, the
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person
who
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watches
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television
might be
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tired and
he
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just
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want
to know the
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ways
without
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make
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a lot of
effort. In this
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way
, TV
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News
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Programs
are considered
a
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good
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way
to do this since
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television
tries to transmit
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informations
in a
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way
that facilitates interpretation to the viewers.

However
, this approach that
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television
has with the
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news
results in a lack of profundity about the topics transmitted in the
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programs
.
Generally
, the
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television
is not
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able
to transmit the complexity of the facts that occurred,
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but
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only
the main points and facts about a certain
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news
.
For instance
,
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many
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news
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programs
talk about
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changes
in the economic scenario of a country
nevertheless
the content within the
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information
is
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very
scarce and the viewer is
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able
to
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only
understand whether the economy of his country is in
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good
shape or not. The viewer would not be
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able
to understand the reasons why the economy of the country is on that situation.

At the same time, a
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person
that do not read and look for
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information
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only
on the TV will
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have to
consume the
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perspective
made by the TV Network. In this sense, a
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person
could have access
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only
to a
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biased
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perspective
about a
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subject and
he would not have the tools to create his
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own
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perspective
about it. If someone
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only
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get
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informed
by watching Fox
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News
or CNN
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News
, this
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person
probably
would have a narrow
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perspective
about the
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informations
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given
since these network
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companies
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tend
to have
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biased
interpretations about the news.

When a
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person
decides to have access to
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newspaper
, he is
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able
to have more
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details
about the facts since reading material
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tend
to be more dense.
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Newspapers
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tend
to demonstrate to its buyers that they have more quality than
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television
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news
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
programs and
they will always try to present them a plethora of facts that
are involved
in a certain
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news
.
Moreover
, even considering that
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newspapers
also
might be
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biased
, they
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tend
to be more
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clear
about their positions, for
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this
reasons they have their editorials sector where the reader can have a
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clear
position from that
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newspaper
. At the same time,
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people
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who reader
frequently
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tend
to have a more developed critical sense.

In conclusion
,
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see
that to learn about the
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news
through a
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newspaper
is a better option than the
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television
.
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Newspapers
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allow
us to know the
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informations
with more profundity and
also
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#039; s
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a
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important
tool to develop our critical sense toward the
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news
and the
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people
who talk about them.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
81Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you prefer to learn about the news in a newspaper or on television? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
537 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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