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Do you prefer to be a team leader or a team member? Use details and examples to support your explanation v.1

Do you prefer to be a team leader or a team member? Use details and examples to support your explanation v. 1
It is often argued that giving advice is necessary to resolve many issues in other’s life. Some people might think that it is more useful to receive advice from seniors than collecting it from juniors. Although some young people are clever, I strongly agree that it is better to get advice from old people. This essay will address in terms of advice with some opinions and examples. First of all, wise advice comes from plentiful experiences. The majority of elderly people have many experiences about the life because they live more than young people which means they are more mature. For example, when juniors struggle some ordinary problems such considering cars to purchase, seniors can give them the good recommendations because they already know how to buy cars affordably so it is helpful to choose easily for young people. Therefore, having many experiences make people wise. Moreover, old people are smarter than young people mostly. In spite of the fact that youth people are pure senior people are more genius because of the higher level of education. For instance, most university students are more knowledgeable than youth such as elementary school students because they spend much time for education. Furthermore, the university students can give suggestions to younger people like how to answer the questions logically. This could be also great part of giving advice. In conclusion, sometimes the age is not important when it comes to giving advice. However, I assume that old people are more appropriate than young people about suggesting recommendations, so we cannot ignore the age.
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advice
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issues in other’s life.
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people
might
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think
that it is more useful to receive
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advice
from seniors than collecting it from juniors. Although
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some
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young
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people
are clever, I
strongly
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agree
that it is better to
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get
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advice
from
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old
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people
. This essay will address in terms of
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advice
with
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some
opinions and examples.

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, wise
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advice
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comes
from plentiful experiences. The majority of elderly
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people
have
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experiences about the life
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they
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live
more than
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young
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people
which means they are more mature.
For example
, when juniors struggle
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some
ordinary problems such considering cars to
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purchase
, seniors can give them the
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good
recommendations
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because
they already know how to
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buy
cars
affordably
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so
it is helpful to choose
easily
for
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young
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people
.
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, having
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experiences
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make
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people
wise.

Moreover
,
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old
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people
are smarter than
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young
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people
mostly
.
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the fact that youth
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people
are pure senior
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are more genius
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because
of the higher level of education.
For instance
, most university students are more knowledgeable than youth such as elementary school students
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because
they spend much time for education.
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, the university students can give suggestions to younger
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people
like how to answer the questions
logically
. This could be
also
great part of giving advice.

In conclusion
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the age is not
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important
when it
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comes
to giving
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advice
.
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, I assume that
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old
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people
are more appropriate than
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young
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people
about suggesting recommendations,
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so
we cannot
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ignore
the age.
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IELTS essay Do you prefer to be a team leader or a team member? Use details and examples to support your explanation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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