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Do you believe in giving an honest opinion, even though the opinion might not be well received? Give details and examples in your response. v.1

Do you believe in giving an honest opinion, even though the opinion might not be well received? Give details and examples in your response. v. 1
Nobody can deny that parental influence is essential for children, at least in cases where children live with their parents, foster family or guardians. However, being away from family and socializing with peer is also crucial to child’ development, especially in the formative years. On the one hand, it is true that parents should be role models for their children, leading them to the progression. Nowadays, many responsible parents are keen to spend time with their children. As a result of this, they are able to prevent children’s misconduct such as bullying, absenteeism and misconduct. Furthermore, being with the family should reduce the risk of children falling victim to crimes such as abduction, or coming under the influence of negative peer pressure. On the other hand, it is impossible to take much care of children where both of the parents are breadwinners. Consequently, they often travel on business trips for extended periods. However, child-minding and after-school childcare are best suitable option for this kind of family. If managed properly, these can be viable alternatives. In addition, spending most of time outside of the home is beneficial for children and their parents, at least communicating with peers will develop children’s soft skills. To recapitulate, while family time is essential for bonding and absorbing patterns of behaviour, there are definite advantages when children are outside the family too. However, this is only possible in a safe environment with well-brought up peers. In addition to this, they can develop their soft skills such as communication and leadership.
Nobody can deny that parental influence is essential for
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children
, at least in cases where
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children
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live
with their
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parents
, foster
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family
or guardians.
However
, being away from
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family
and socializing with
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peer
is
also
crucial to child’ development,
especially
in the formative years.

On the one hand, it is true that
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parents
should be role models for their
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children
, leading them to the progression. Nowadays,
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many
responsible
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parents
are keen to spend time with their
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children
.
As a result
of this, they are able to
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prevent
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children’s
misconduct such as bullying, absenteeism and misconduct.
Furthermore
, being with the
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family
should
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reduce
the
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risk
of
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children
falling victim to crimes such as abduction, or coming under the influence of
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negative
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peer
pressure.

On the other hand
, it is impossible to take much care of
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children
where both of the
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parents
are breadwinners.
Consequently
, they
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often
travel on business trips for extended periods.
However
, child-minding and after-school childcare
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are best
suitable option for this kind of
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family
. If managed
properly
, these can be viable alternatives.
In addition
, spending
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most of time
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outside of
the home is beneficial for
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children
and their
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parents
, at least communicating with
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peers
will develop
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children’s
soft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

To recapitulate, while
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family
time is essential for bonding and absorbing patterns of
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behaviour
, there are
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definite
advantages when
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children
are outside the
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family
too.
However
, this is
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only
possible in a safe environment with well-brought up
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peers
.
In addition
to this, they can develop their soft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as communication and leadership.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do you believe in giving an honest opinion, even though the opinion might not be well received? Give details and examples in your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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