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describe what subliminal perception is and explain how the experiment discussed by the professor illustrate this phenomenon. v.1

describe what subliminal perception is and explain how the experiment discussed by the professor illustrate this phenomenon. v. 1
Financial stability and material things are often measured to decide the success state of a human being. This essay disagrees that money cannot be considered in this comparison. This essay will first explain why financial stability is not enough to track a successful being, followed by a demonstration of the characteristics of a successful person. There are many points to prove why money cannot be considered to track a person’s success. Firstly, money cannot combat stress. This is because when a person suffers from a work stress, irrespective of being diagnosed by a psychologist may not make that person relieve from it, but as considered by many, love and affection from family members and friends can definitely cure it. For example, The Sunday Times has recently reported that 67% of top-tier salary employees make an effort to spend time with their family in order to minimise stress from their busy lives rather than visiting a doctor. Another reason to consider why money cannot be a successful measure is that it is not on the same level with happiness. That is to say, an average earning person may be happy if he is working in his passionate profession, but it cannot be the same with the person earning more and not being happy. UK is the prime example, almost 67% employees have reported that they would quit their highly paid job and pursue their passionate professions if the cost of living is affordable. Therefore, it is clear that money cannot be a measure to track an individual’s success rate. Finally, according to me, the definition of a successful person is based on individuals and their perspective towards life. If people were able to follow their dreams and maintain a healthy relationship with friends and family, they can be definitely considered successful in terms of happiness. Take, for example, my son was extremely passionate with video-games and when he landed a job in that industry, it made him much happier than the expensive gift which I presented him for his birthday. Hence, it is patently clear that following one’s dream is directly proportional to being successful as it is tracked in the terms of joy and happiness. In conclusion, it is clear that money cannot be measured as a successful possession as it cannot buy stress free relationships and happiness. Success should be tracked based on an individual’s goals that they set in their life and achieving them.
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measured to decide the
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state of a human being. This essay disagrees that
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money
cannot be
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considered
in this comparison. This essay will
first
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explain
why financial stability is not
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enough
to
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track
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successful
being, followed by a demonstration of the characteristics of a
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successful
person.

There are
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many
points to prove why
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money
cannot be
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considered
to
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track
a
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person’s
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success
.
Firstly
,
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money
cannot combat
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stress
. This is
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because
when a
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person
suffers from a work
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stress
, irrespective of
being diagnosed
by a psychologist may not
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make
that
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person
relieve from it,
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as
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considered
by
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,
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and affection from family members and friends can definitely cure it.
For example
, The Sunday Times has recently reported that 67% of top-tier salary employees
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make
an effort to spend time with their family in order to
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minimise
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stress
from their busy
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lives
rather
than visiting a doctor.

Another reason to consider why
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money
cannot be a
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successful
measure is that it is not on the same level with happiness.
That is
to say, an average earning
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person
may be happy if he is working in his passionate profession,
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but
it cannot be the same with the
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person
earning more and not being happy. UK is the prime example, almost 67% employees have reported that they would quit their
highly
paid job and pursue their passionate professions if the cost of living is affordable.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that
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money
cannot be a measure to
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track
an individual’s
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success
rate.

Finally
, according to me, the definition of a
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successful
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person
is based
on individuals and their perspective towards life. If
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people
were able to follow their dreams and maintain a healthy relationship with friends and family, they can be definitely
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considered
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successful
in terms of happiness. Take,
for example
, my son was
extremely
passionate with video-games and when he landed a job in that industry, it made him much happier than the expensive gift which I presented him for his birthday.
Hence
, it is
patently
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clear
that following one’s dream is
directly
proportional to being
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successful
as it is
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tracked
in the terms of joy and happiness.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that
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money
cannot
be measured
as a
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successful
possession as it cannot
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buy
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stress
free relationships and happiness.
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Success
should be
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tracked
based on an individual’s goals that they set in their life and achieving them.
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IELTS essay describe what subliminal perception is and explain how the experiment discussed by the professor illustrate this phenomenon. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
406 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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