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Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v.2

Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v. 2
I believe we should deliberate the consequences of the decisions we would make before we settle down the choice, especially when it matters a lot to us. In daily life we would meet lots of decisions everyday. The choices are significant because they would affect us in many mays where we could not predict what will happen later. Thus every time we should be cautious of the decisions, it is proper for all of us to think again the result of the choice we make. Thinking a lot of time is a good quality for a person. I will discuss my view there in after. To begin with, important decisions would affect our life with no exact prediction we can make. Once I was making decisions on which major I should choose before entering the university. Although I was fond of learning English, my father told me that foreign languages like English are the tools for people all over the world to communicate. He suggested me that I could develop the hobby of Learning English when I was learning my major. With a deep consideration of mine, I chose Machenichal Engineering as my studying major. Meanwhile I took part in the English club in my university. Then I continued my hobby of learning English. Several years later, I found that the deliberately consideration of choosing major was helpful, I really benefit from the choice I made because it brought me lots of offer from several major factories in China. In addition, as we could not predict what will happen if we make certain decision, we should think of all the possibilities behind these important choices. The more we could profigure, the more precisely we could make the choice. Because these decisions are important to a person, it is a good quality to reconsider the matters what would happen. Especially in Business, there are so many event prior our preparation. Once I was organizing a business meeting, when I was preparing the speech for my bosses, I could not fortell who will read this speech, because there are two bosses in my company. So I wrote two different drafts. So no matter who would be on the stage, my draft would be suitable for himself. After the meeting, I was praised by both of my bosses.
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before
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,
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when it matters a
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lot
to us. In daily life we would
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meet
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lots
of
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decisions
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everyday
. The
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choices
are significant
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because
they would affect us in
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many
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mays
where we could not predict what will happen later.
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every time we should be cautious of the
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decisions
, it is proper for all of us to
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think
again the result of the
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choice
we
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make
. Thinking a
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lot
of time is a
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good
quality for a person. I will discuss my view there in after.

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begin
with,
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important
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decisions
would affect our life with no exact prediction we can
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make
. Once I was making
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decisions
on which
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major
I should choose
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before
entering the university. Although I was fond of
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learning
English, my father
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told
me that foreign languages like English are the tools for
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people
all over the world to communicate. He suggested me that I could develop the hobby of
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Learning
English when I was
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learning
my
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major
. With a deep consideration of mine, I chose
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Machenichal
Engineering as my studying
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major
.
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Meanwhile
I
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took part
in the English club in my university. Then I continued my hobby of
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learning
English. Several years later, I found that the
deliberately
consideration of choosing
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major
was helpful, I
really
benefit from the
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choice
I made
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because
it brought me
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lots of offer
from several
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major
factories in China.

In addition
, as we could not predict what will happen if we
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make
certain
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decision
, we should
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think
of all the possibilities behind these
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important
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choices
. The more we could
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profigure
, the more
precisely
we could
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make
the
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choice
.
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Because
these
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decisions
are
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important
to a person, it is a
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good
quality to reconsider the matters what would happen.
Especially
in Business, there are
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so
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many
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event
prior our preparation. Once I was organizing a business meeting, when I was preparing the speech for my bosses, I could not
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fortell
who will read this speech,
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because
there are two bosses in my
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company
.
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So
I wrote two
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different
drafts.
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So
no matter who would be on the stage, my draft would be suitable for himself. After the meeting, I
was praised
by both of my bosses.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
385 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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