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27. Some believe that in comparison with those never attended college, peopleattended college will be more successful in career. Do you agree or disagreewith this statement? Please give specific reasons for your opinion. v.1

27. Some believe that in comparison with those never attended college, peopleattended college will be more successful in career. Please give specific reasons for your opinion. v. 1
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue that is mass media had an extensive influence in shaping our lives and ideas. The role of media such as newspaper, television and other platform is to inform, educate and entertain the people. A lion's share of society favours it, however the rest goes averse it. The following paragraph would highlight my personal perspective along with an apt example. I see eye to eye with the central idea for various reasons. First and foremost, some media like television and newspaper are spreading the fake news without any scientific proof. As a result, the way of people thinking has been changed due to the adoption of that news on their lives without verifying it. Secondly, most people spend their free time for exploration of new things and obtain new ideas from media platforms. For instance, when people watch crime shows on television their perception along with justice had been changed. Adding further, the media are also influential in the way they facilitate the spread of culture and lifestyle. To substantiate, there is an epitome of the Michel Jackson, would never be a well known if the media could not reach in every society on the globe. On the logger's head, some critics ag against above assertions. But I am of the opinion that we should decrease the dependency of mass media. And also check the Whether information provided by the media is foam in a correct way or not. By proper verifying the news we should make perception along with that matter of news.
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that is
mass
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media
had an extensive influence in shaping our
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lives
and
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ideas
. The role of
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media
such as newspaper, television and other platform is to inform, educate and entertain the
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people
. A lion's share of society
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favours
it,
however
the rest goes averse it. The following paragraph would highlight my personal perspective along with an apt example.

I
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eye to eye with the central
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idea
for various reasons.
First
and foremost,
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some
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media
like television and newspaper are spreading the fake
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news
without any scientific proof.
As a result
, the way of
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people
thinking has been
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changed
due to the adoption of that
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news
on their
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lives
without verifying it.
Secondly
, most
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people
spend their free time for exploration of
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new
things and obtain
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new
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ideas
from
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media
platforms.
For instance
, when
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people
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watch
crime
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shows
on television their perception along with justice had been
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changed
.

Adding
further
, the
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media
are
also
influential in the way they facilitate the spread of culture and lifestyle.

To substantiate, there is an epitome of the Michel Jackson, would never be a well known if the
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media
could not reach in every society on the globe.

On the logger's head,
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some
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critics ag
against above assertions.
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But
I am of the opinion that we should decrease the dependency of mass
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media
. And
also
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check
the Whether information provided by the
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media
is foam
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in a correct way
or not. By proper verifying the
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news
we should
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perception along with that matter of
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news
.
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IELTS essay 27. Some believe that in comparison with those never attended college, peopleattended college will be more successful in career. Please give specific reasons for your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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