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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Although, life today is better than it used to be, human behavior causing problems that will mean life in the future is less comfortable. Use specific reasons and examples to support your point of view. v.12

Although, life today is better than it used to be, human behavior causing problems that will mean life in the future is less comfortable. Use specific reasons and examples to support your point of view. v. 12
The methods and patterns of communication we use today are very different to what they have been in the past. Not only has this had an impact on businesses, there has also been effected on families. I disagree with the view that interaction has decreased between family members. I firmly believe there is more communication in families nowadays. In this essay I will use examples from UK research on mobile phones and internet communications to prove my argument. Firstly, the growth in mobile phones allows family members to contact each other regularly. This is largely because the majority of the population carries a phone. A recent UK mobile operator survey showed that spouses contact each other ten times a day on average. This was not possible before the widespread use of mobile phones. This demonstrates that we have never been better at staying in touch with our loved ones. Secondly, the creation of worldwide internet communication allows families to get in touch easily, even though they may be in different countries. This is due to the speed at which we can communicate with each other today. For instance, the Skype company has published statistics showing that seventy percent of people use Skype to contact family overseas. Therefore, in today's world we are more connected with our family, despite the distance. To summarise, the advancements in mobile phone technology and internet communications have revolutionised the way we stay in touch with our families. We are now better connected to families because of the speed and ease of these innovations. It is predicted that we will continue to converse in many new ways in the future. I believe this will bring us closer to our families.
The methods and patterns of
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has this had an impact on businesses, there has
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families
. I disagree with the view that interaction has decreased between
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family
members. I
firmly
believe there is more
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communication
in
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families
nowadays. In this essay I will
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use
examples from UK research on mobile
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phones
and internet communications to prove my argument.

Firstly
, the growth in mobile
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phones
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allows
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family
members to contact each other
regularly
. This is
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because
the majority of the population carries a
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phone
. A recent UK mobile operator survey
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showed
that spouses contact each other ten times a day on average. This was not possible
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before
the widespread
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use
of mobile
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phones
. This demonstrates that we have never been better at staying in touch with our
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loved
ones.

Secondly
, the creation of worldwide internet
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communication
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allows
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families
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in touch
easily
,
even though
they may be in
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different
countries. This is due to the speed at which we can communicate with each other
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today
.
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, the Skype
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company
has published statistics showing that seventy percent of
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people
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use
Skype to contact
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family
overseas.
Therefore
, in
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today
's world we are more connected with our
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family
, despite the distance.

To
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summarise
, the advancements in mobile
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phone
technology and internet communications have
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revolutionised
the way we stay in touch with our
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families
. We are
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now
better connected to
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families
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because
of the speed and
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ease
of these innovations. It
is predicted
that we will continue to converse in
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many
new ways in the future. I believe this will bring us closer to our
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families
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Although, life today is better than it used to be, human behavior causing problems that will mean life in the future is less comfortable. Use specific reasons and examples to support your point of view. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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