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Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing behavior that will mean life future less comfortable v.1

Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing behavior that will mean life future less comfortable v. 1
Increased amount of traffic has become a thing of concern in many cities and towns around the world. There are some factors that contribute to this and the essay below will elaborate on it and also, shine more light on the solutions to these issues. Firstly, it has been known that the number of vehicles on the road has an impact on the flow of movement in the place. Big cities have many cars moving around at the same time, thereby causing a slow traffic. For instance, in the rural areas where there are fewer number of motors, people are noticed to get to their workplace faster. However, the possible remedy to this problem is to reduce the amount of individuals using their private cars to commute the town. This can be achieved by subsidizing the fees for the commercial buses and also, that of other means of transportation like trains and ferries. Secondly, another factor worthy of note is the size of roads in the cities. Many ways in the cities are narrow, therefore, making it possible for only one lane for in and one lane for out in many locations. This will of course encourage a drag on how people navigate around the town. And again, a good way to eliminate this effect is by constructing more lanes to accommodate more cars at the same time. When this is done, it will reduce the amount of traffic on the road. A good example is that a well known country has drastically reduced the problem of traffic by building some ten lanes roads in its major cities. The citizens are so happy at how fast they get to their destinations because of this development. To conclude, the problem of traffic has gained a world-wide attention. Its causes like many cars and small sizes of the roads has some good solutions which will greatly improve the situation when applied.
Increased amount of
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traffic
has become a thing of concern in
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many
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cities
and towns around the world. There are
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some
factors that contribute to this and the essay below will elaborate on it and
also
, shine more light on the solutions to these issues.

Firstly
, it has
been known
that the number of vehicles on the
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road
has an impact on the flow of movement in the place.
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Big
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cities
have
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many
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cars
moving around at the same time, thereby causing a slow
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traffic
.
For instance
, in the rural areas where there are fewer number of motors,
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people
are noticed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to their workplace faster.
However
, the possible remedy to this problem is to
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reduce
the amount of individuals using their private
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cars
to commute the town. This can
be achieved
by subsidizing the fees for the commercial buses and
also
, that of other means of transportation like trains and ferries.

Secondly
, another factor worthy of note is the size of
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roads
in the
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cities
.
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Many
ways in the
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cities
are narrow,
therefore
, making it possible for
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only
one
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lane
for in and one
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lane
for out in
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many
locations. This will
of course
encourage a drag on how
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people
navigate around the town. And again, a
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good
way to eliminate this effect is by constructing more
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lanes
to accommodate more
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cars
at the same time. When this
is done
, it will
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reduce
the amount of
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traffic
on the
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road
. A
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good
example is that a well known country has
drastically
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reduced
the problem of
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traffic
by building
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some
ten
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lanes
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roads
in its major
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cities
. The citizens are
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so
happy at how
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fast
they
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get
to their destinations
because of this
development.

To conclude
, the problem of
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traffic
has gained a world-wide attention. Its causes like
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many
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cars
and
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small
sizes of the
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roads
has
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some
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good
solutions which will
greatly
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improve
the situation when applied.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing behavior that will mean life future less comfortable v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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