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1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Climate change, a major threat to life on Earth, is caused mainly by our imprudent actions. The temperature rise, in particular, is a troubling issue that has been preoccupying many across the globe. This essay will discuss some of the ruthless actions of men, which contribute to the global warming and put forward several solutions to overcome the same. Global warming is primarily a problem of too much carbon dioxide (CO2) in the atmosphere resulting in the greenhouse effect. This carbon overload, in turn, is caused mainly by burning of fossil fuels which are used to generate electricity, and as fuel for our vehicles. Furthermore, tropical deforestation, also by human hands, is another major contributor to global warming. When these forests are burned illegally for deforestation, immense amount of carbon is further released into the atmosphere which cannot be absorbed by the trees as the forests are gone. Nevertheless, there are various measures that both governments and individuals could take to prevent or at least mitigate, global warming. As individuals, we should try to limit our contribution to the surging global temperature by becoming more energy efficient. We should use zero-carbon footprint transportations such cycle more often besides commuting by public transportations whenever possible. The government, on the other hand, should phase out fossil fuel dependency and rev up on renewable energy as the source of energy. Therefore, renewable resources such as sunlight and wind should be harnessed to provide 'clean energy'. Scotland, for example, generated a whopping 98% of this year energy requirement using wind turbines and aims to be 100% fossil-fuel free by 2020. In conclusion, higher world temperature is mainly due to our greedy act of extreme deforestation and fossil fuel consumption. Nonetheless, the consequence of raising global temperature should be delayed, halted or even reversed, by switching over to renewable energy sources and being energy-efficient at individual-level, before time runs out.
Climate
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change
, a major threat to life on Earth,
is caused
mainly
by our imprudent actions. The
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temperature
rise,
in particular
, is a troubling issue that has been preoccupying
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many
across the globe. This essay will discuss
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some of the
ruthless actions of
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men
, which contribute to the
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global
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warming
and put forward several solutions to overcome the same.

Global
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warming
is
primarily
a problem of too much carbon dioxide (CO2) in the atmosphere resulting in the greenhouse effect. This carbon overload, in turn,
is caused
mainly
by burning of fossil
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fuels
which are
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used
to generate electricity, and as
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fuel
for our vehicles.
Furthermore
, tropical deforestation,
also
by human hands, is another major contributor to
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global
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warming
. When these forests
are burned
illegally
for deforestation, immense amount of carbon is
further
released into the atmosphere which cannot
be absorbed
by the trees as the forests
are gone
.

Nevertheless
, there are various measures that both
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governments
and individuals could take to
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prevent
or at least mitigate,
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global
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warming
. As individuals, we should try to limit our contribution to the surging
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global
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temperature
by becoming more
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energy
efficient. We should
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use
zero-carbon footprint transportations such cycle more
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often
besides
commuting by public transportations whenever possible. The
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government
,
on the other hand
, should phase out fossil
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fuel
dependency and rev up on renewable
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energy
as the source of
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energy
.
Therefore
, renewable resources such as sunlight and wind should
be harnessed
to provide 'clean energy'. Scotland,
for example
, generated a whopping 98% of this year
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energy
requirement using wind turbines and aims to be 100% fossil-fuel free by 2020.

In conclusion
, higher world
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temperature
is
mainly
due to our greedy act of extreme deforestation and fossil
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fuel
consumption. Nonetheless, the consequence of raising
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global
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temperature
should
be delayed
, halted or even reversed, by switching over to renewable
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energy
sources and being energy-efficient at individual-level,
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before
time runs out.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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