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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v.213

Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v. 213
It is an irrefutable fact that, in recent year, hosting sporting events such as the Olympics and the World Cup can bring benefits to the host country has caused numerous controversies and drown public attention. While an increasing number of people don’t have much faith in the benefit to the anchor countries, I staunchly agree with the above-mentioned statement due to a notable reason. There are numerous factors which affirms that hosting sporting events has myriad benefits to the host countries could be supported. Initially, an economic boost for the entertainer nation could be a substantial factor to be considered. It is generally seen that when people hosting sport events such as the Olympics and the World Cup for juveniles that could make their lives more efficient. For instance, a recent article published in The Age revealed that more than half of people insist Olympic and the World Cup can bring benefits to the owner countries. Besides, it can be stated that the Olympic and the World Cup can be a good source of information to learn things if used correctly. On the other hand, there are several reasons why Olympic is considered to be disadvantages to society. One of them is that the viewing of the Olympic can be a source of distraction in our lives, turning away our focus from the more important things in the life. It can also be argued that we tend to west an hour in front of the Olympic instead of working on our goal and ambitions of life. In the end, indeed, while there is a strong argument on both sides of the case, as far as I am concerned that the World Cup and the Olympic usage is the best avoided or minimized as we should focus on the other productive take instead.
It is an irrefutable fact that, in recent year, hosting sporting
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events
such as the Olympics and the
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World
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Cup
can bring
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benefits
to the host
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country
has caused numerous controversies and drown public attention. While an increasing number of
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people
don’t have much faith in the
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benefit
to the anchor
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countries
, I
staunchly
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agree
with the above-mentioned statement due to a notable reason.

There are numerous factors which affirms that hosting sporting
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events
has myriad
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benefits
to the host
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countries
could
be supported
.
Initially
, an economic boost for the entertainer nation could be a substantial factor to
be considered
. It is
generally
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seen
that when
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people
hosting sport
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events
such as the Olympics and the
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World
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Cup
for juveniles that could
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make
their
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lives
more efficient.
For instance
, a recent article published in The Age revealed that more than half of
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people
insist Olympic and the
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World
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Cup
can bring
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benefits
to the owner
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countries
.
Besides
, it can
be stated
that the Olympic and the
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World
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Cup
can be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
source of information to learn things if
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used
correctly
.

On the other hand
, there are several reasons why Olympic
is considered
to be disadvantages to society. One of them is that the viewing of the Olympic can be a source of distraction in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
, turning away our focus from the more
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important
things in the life. It can
also
be argued
that we tend to west an hour in front of the Olympic
instead
of working on our goal and ambitions of life.

In the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
,
indeed
, while there is a strong argument on both sides of the case, as far as I
am concerned
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
World
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cup
and the Olympic usage is the best avoided or minimized as we should focus on the other productive take
instead
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v. 213

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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