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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that it is easier for young people today to make decisions for their own lives than in the past v.2

that it is easier for young people today to make decisions for their own lives than in the past v. 2
People in increasing number these days would say that young adult are more likely to make their decision easier than the previous generation. However, I disagree with them. I beleive that young people having difficulties to make their won decision. The basis for my views is based on the fact that yound individuals are more inluence with technology and social media. In the past technology was limited. Factories were unable to produce massive production of different goods and products. People have no option except accepting the available goods. With limited option, people had no problems deciding witch goods they want to buy. In contrast, young people are puzzeled from the aboundant goods and products that became avialable due to techology advancement. Given that there are different car companies produce different cars style with a compatitive price, people who want to buy a car have a dificult time choosing which car in the best. If there are only one car company available at the market, People would have no other choice except buying this car despite its drow backs. In addition to the previous point, the introduction of internet made it more difficult for younger adults to make a decision. In the past, people had been buying their priducts according to their internal guts feeling. If they feel satisfied with the products, they would buy it immidetitly without any hasitation. By introducing of information exchange through the internet, Products have became more puzzeling and more ambiguous. Unfortuniatly, people nowaday' s came to a happite to check internet reviews on certain products before they buy it. Since the reviews could be missleading and confusing, young people could miss a good oportunity to buy an excellent product. For example, when I moved to Vancouver city last year, I wanted to rent an appartment. By searching online I came across to a nice appartment in a high rise building. However, when I checked the reviews, I was surprised by the negative feedbacks on that building. As a result, I did not even give it a chance to physically check the appartment. Later on a friend of mine rented that appartment and he told me that he realy enjoying the great serveces the buiding owners provided to their tanent. If I did not relay on online information, I could rent this appartment. As a conclusion, according to what I have been discussed previousely, I asserts that young people have difficulties to make their decision copare to their peers in the past. Yound people currently are more distracted with aboundant options available on the market and deceitful information on the internet.
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young
adult are more likely to
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make
their
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decision
easier than the previous generation.
However
, I disagree with them. I
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beleive
that
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young
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people
having difficulties to
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make
their won
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decision
. The basis for my views
is based
on the fact that
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yound
individuals are more
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inluence
with technology and social media.

In the past technology
was limited
. Factories were unable to produce massive production of
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different
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goods
and
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products
.
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People
have no option except accepting the available
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goods
. With limited option,
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people
had no problems deciding witch
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goods
they want to
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buy
.
In contrast
,
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young
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people
are
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puzzeled
from the
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aboundant
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goods
and
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products
that became
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avialable
due to
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techology
advancement.
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different
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car
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companies
produce
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different
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cars
style with a
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compatitive
price,
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people
who want to
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buy
a
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car
have a
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dificult
time choosing which
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car
in the best. If there are
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only
one
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car
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company
available at the market,
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People
would have no other choice except buying this
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car
despite its
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drow
backs.

In addition
to the previous point, the introduction of internet made it more difficult for younger adults to
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make
a
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decision
. In the past,
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people
had been buying their
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priducts
according to their internal guts feeling. If they feel satisfied with the
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products
, they would
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buy
it
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immidetitly
without any
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hasitation
. By introducing of information exchange through the internet,
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Products
have
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became
more
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puzzeling
and more ambiguous.
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Unfortuniatly
,
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people
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nowaday&
#039; s came to a
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happite
to
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check
internet reviews on certain
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products
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before
they
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buy
it. Since the reviews could be
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missleading
and confusing,
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young
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people
could miss a
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good
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oportunity
to
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buy
an excellent
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product
.
For example
, when I
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moved
to Vancouver city last year, I wanted to rent an
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appartment
. By searching online I came across to a nice
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appartment
in a high rise building.
However
, when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
the reviews, I
was surprised
by the
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negative
feedbacks on that building.
As a result
, I did not even give it a chance to
physically
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check
the
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appartment
. Later on a friend of mine rented that
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appartment and
he
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told
me that he
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realy
enjoying the great
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serveces
the
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buiding
owners provided to their
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tanent
. If I did not relay on online information, I could rent this
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appartment
.

As a conclusion, according to what I have
been discussed
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previousely
, I
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asserts
that
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young
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people
have difficulties to
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make
their
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decision
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copare
to their peers in the past.
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Yound
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people
currently
are more distracted with
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aboundant
options available on the market and deceitful information on the internet.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Mistakes

IELTS essay that it is easier for young people today to make decisions for their own lives than in the past v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
435 words
6.0
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