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International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. v. 2
International sporting events is one of the reasons a country go through economic abyss. Some people believ that international sporting competitions are benficial to the hosting country. On the other hand, others think that those events have more disadvantages than advantages to the country. From my point of view, the cons outweigh the pros. First, hosting international sporting events brings the hosting country in the middle of attention. Which causes many tourists to visit the country not only for watching the benefits, but also to see the country' s tradition and culture, This brings economical benefits, as well as making the country better known and encourages more people to visit the country later. However, hosting such event requires so much money and it far outweighs the income coming from tourists. The hosting country will try to make the event as admirable as possible. Therefore, the stadiums, the street decoration, the cleaning and many other things will have to be done at the top level, which will cause more money to be spent. For example, in 2014, Brazil hosted FIFA World Cup and after the event had ended, Brazil went into a deep economic abyss which brang the poverty of Brazil to its highest, All in all, although hosting an international sporting event has advantages, it causes more problems to the hosting country then it brings benefits. Due to the fact that the country puts its economic stability in order to host an international sporting event which is a risky move for most country. The citizens of the country will suffer from the results in the long run.
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is one of the reasons a
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go through economic abyss.
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people
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believ
that
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sporting competitions are
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benficial
to the
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hosting
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.
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, others
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think
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have more disadvantages than advantages to the
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. From my point of view, the cons outweigh the pros.

First
,
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hosting
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international
sporting
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events
brings the
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hosting
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country
in the middle of attention. Which causes
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many
tourists to visit the
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country
not
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only
for watching the benefits,
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#039; s tradition and culture, This brings
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benefits,
as well
as making the
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country
better known and encourages more
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people
to visit the
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later.

However
,
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hosting
such
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event
requires
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so
much money and it far outweighs the income coming from tourists. The
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hosting
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country
will try to
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make
the
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as admirable as possible.
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, the stadiums, the street decoration, the cleaning and
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many
other things will
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have to
be done
at the
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top level
, which will cause more money to
be spent
.
For example
, in 2014, Brazil hosted FIFA World Cup and after the
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event
had ended, Brazil went into a deep economic abyss which
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brang
the poverty of Brazil to its highest,

All in all, although
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hosting
an
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international
sporting
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event
has advantages, it causes more problems to the
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hosting
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country
then it brings benefits. Due to the fact that the
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country
puts its economic stability in order to host an
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international
sporting
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event
which is a risky
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move
for most
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country
. The citizens of the
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country
will suffer from the results in the long run.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
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