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Do you agree or disagree with the statement? There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person v.4

There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person v. 4
Being popular has positives and negatives in the person's life. Some people feel that celebrities should not be disturbed by paparazzi and the others think this is all about results of being famous. In my opinion, celebrities should have some free space, and also world needs news about them. The celebrities have a personal life, whenever they go out for some vacation, they are quickly surrounded by photographers. Especially, public starts taking photographs and autograph with them that disturbs an individual. Many people feel they should not be disturbed since they also have a personal life. In addition, The celebrities sometimes must be heavily guarded from the public. For an example, M. S Dhoni, the famous Indian cricketer, often goes out for tours to other countries since the camera guys in his own country disturbs him a lot. On the other hand, some people think that this is all because of the fame. Obviously, before entering into the field, the person knows they might become popular some day. Hence, they should be prepared to face all this negatives of fame. However, some celebrities love this kind of attraction, therefore it is always based on the individual. For instance, Karina Kapoor, an Indian actress and model, always welcomes her followers wherever she goes. In my opinion, the popular guys will have a personal life, especially they will feel weird if pictures of them are taken everywhere. But after becoming popular they can't avoid their fans also, hence they should adjust and act before the camera always. To conclude, it is very difficult to live a life of fame one since they have to act before the camera always. Moreover, the public and photographers have to understand their feelings and give them their personal space.
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has positives and negatives in the person's
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life
.
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people
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celebrities
should not
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by paparazzi and the others
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think
this is all about results of being
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famous
. In my opinion,
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celebrities
should have
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some
free space, and
also
world needs news about them.

The
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celebrities
have a
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personal
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life
, whenever they go out for
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some
vacation, they are
quickly
surrounded by photographers.
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starts
taking photographs and autograph with them that disturbs an individual.
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people
feel they should not
be disturbed
since they
also
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personal
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life
.
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, The
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celebrities
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sometimes
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must
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heavily
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guarded from
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Dhoni
, the
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famous
Indian cricketer,
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goes out for tours to other countries since the camera guys in his
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country disturbs him a lot.

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,
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because
of the fame.
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,
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before
entering into the field, the person knows they might become
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popular
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some
day.
Hence
, they should
be prepared
to face all this negatives of fame.
However
,
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some
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celebrities
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love
this kind of attraction,
therefore
it is always based on the individual.
For instance
, Karina
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Kapoor
, an Indian actress and model, always welcomes her followers wherever she goes.

In my opinion, the
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popular
guys will have a
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personal
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life
,
especially
they will feel weird if pictures of them
are taken
everywhere.
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But
after becoming
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popular
they can't avoid their fans
also
,
hence
they should adjust and act
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before
the camera
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always
.

To conclude
, it is
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very
difficult to
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live
a
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life
of fame one since they
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have to
act
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before
the camera
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always
.
Moreover
, the public and photographers
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have to
understand their feelings and give them their
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personal
space.
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IELTS essay There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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