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Do you agree or disagree with the followings statement? Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v.2

Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 2
Nowadays, there is a buzz topic about whether professors’ performance at class should be evaluated by students or other teachers. Even though some people may claim that the teachers who works together may be the better choices to evaluate their colleagues, form my perspective, I prefer students who attend the professors’ class to give their evaluations. To begin with, the evaluations of students who attend teacher’s class can be much more fair and impartial due to their class experiences. On the average, students will evaluate their teacher when the class is over. Because they really experienced teacher’s teaching and atmosphere of the class, they have learnt what their teacher has exactly taught. Thus they can judge and decide whether the teacher’s teaching meet their demand for knowledge and instilling. As a result, they can evaluate their teacher more fairly and impartially owing to their learning and achievements. For instance, my cousin Jim who study in the university in the USA. He needs to evaluate their professors who teach his subjects by filling a questionnaire. They will decide wether their teaching is helpful for students and how is the quality according to their experiences. In contrast, if the schools asked other teachers to evaluate, the result will not be typical and have no representativeness to judge a teacher’s teaching quality because other teachers do not really experience. Furthermore, the evaluations from students can help professors improve themselves better. In general, in the evaluations, students will point out the advantages and disadvantages. They will give suggestions to the aspects which can help professors to meet the demands. They will also give solutions and what students really would like to study and learn about on the lessons. Thus the teacher will know and decide to change the teaching styles or methods to meet students’ requirement. As a result, the teaching results and the quality will be greatly improved. In contrast, if others teachers need to evaluate teachers, they will not know the aspects they do not do well in and they need to improve. Admittedly, letting other teachers to evaluate the teacher may efficiently reduce the bias and the prejudice occurring among the students. As we know, if a student do not like the professor’s teaching styles, he may not give the professor a good evaluation even though they do well in this class. Thus the professors will not get the ideal results even though he put efforts a lot. In a nutshell, in the terms of all above mentioned, I prefer to let students who attend professor’s class to evaluate professors who teach their disciplines due to the fairness and improvement on teaching quality.
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students
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teachers
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who
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works
together may be the better choices to
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evaluate
their colleagues, form my perspective, I prefer
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students
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who
attend the
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professors’
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class
to
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give
their evaluations.

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with, the
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students
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class
can be much more
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fair
and impartial due to their
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class
experiences. On the average,
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students
will
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evaluate
their
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teacher
when the
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is over.
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they
really
experienced
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teacher’s
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teaching
and atmosphere of the
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class
, they have
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learnt
what their
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has exactly taught.
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they can judge and decide whether the
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teacher’s
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teaching
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meet
their demand for knowledge and instilling. As a
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result
, they can
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evaluate
their
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teacher
more
fairly
and
impartially
owing to their learning and achievements.
For instance
, my cousin Jim
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who
study in the university in the USA. He needs to
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evaluate
their
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professors
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who
teach his subjects by filling a questionnaire. They will decide
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wether
their
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teaching
is helpful for
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students
and how is the
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quality
according to their experiences.
In contrast
, if the schools asked
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other
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teachers
to
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evaluate
, the
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result
will not be typical and have no representativeness to judge a
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teacher’s
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teaching
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quality
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because
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other
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teachers
do not
really
experience.

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, the
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evaluations
from
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students
can
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help
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professors
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improve
themselves better.
In general
, in the
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evaluations
,
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students
will point out the advantages and disadvantages. They will
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give
suggestions to the aspects which can
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help
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professors
to
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meet
the demands. They will
also
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give
solutions and what
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students
really
would like to study and learn about on the lessons.
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the
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teacher
will know and decide to
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change
the
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teaching
styles or methods to
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meet
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students’
requirement. As a
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result
, the
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teaching
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results
and the
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quality
will be
greatly
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improved
.
In contrast
, if others
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teachers
need to
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evaluate
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teachers
, they will not know the aspects they do not do well
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in and
they need to
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improve
.

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, letting
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teachers
to
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evaluate
the
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may
efficiently
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reduce
the bias and the prejudice occurring among the
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students
. As we know
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, if
a
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student
do not like the
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professor’s
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teaching
styles, he may not
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give
the
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professor
a
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good
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evaluation
even though
they do well in this
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class
.
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the
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professors
will not
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get
the ideal
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results
even though
he put efforts a lot.

In a nutshell, in the terms of all above mentioned, I prefer to
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let
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students
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who
attend
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professor’s
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class
to
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evaluate
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professors
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who
teach their disciplines due to the fairness and improvement on
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teaching
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quality
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
82Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
442 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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