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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: People should always show their strong emotions (such as excitement, anger, joy). Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.2

: People should always show their strong emotions (such as excitement, anger, joy). Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2
People normally try to communicate with each other in everyday life trough different ways. Sometimes a person may show its feels and emotions to make someone understand better or get a specific message indirectly. However, there is a controversy between people that any one should present its emotion openly to other individuals or not. Personally, I think that everyone should have the ability to express its feelings in society due to many reasons which I support them strongly. First, presenting emotions and feeling may help anyone to transfer his message correctly because, someone may not have the ability to completely told his idea in words. Emotions will help you to communicate with other individuals properly. I believe it would be easier to know someone if that person present its emotions to you overtly. For example, my friend Jim always had trouble with others since they mostly misjudged him by his words and beliefs. It was so bad that he started seeing a shrink. His therapist told him that he must show his emotions and feelings about whatever he intended to talk about. Surprisingly, his problem was decreased radically and his friends found that they judged him wrongly before only because he could not use the proper words for telling the massage right. Secondly, forcing yourself to hide your feelings and emotions may harm you seriously in long-term without you knowing that you are doing damage to your soul unintentionally. Scientists have shown that presenting emotions may assist humans to put out their inside feelings and anxieties which were suppressed during time gradually. If we prevent any person from showing its true emotions this would lead to their sense of banishment from their surrounding environment. So, they may become depressed and isolated. Last but not least, presenting your inside to your friends and family can also help you to revise yourself any different occasions. You can show a wrong emotion in condition without understanding it. But, your friends and family can help you by telling you that your reaction was not right in an especial situation which can help you to control your emotions and express them exactly in the moment it was needed. In conclusion, feelings are some things that are shaped inside us. Usually we do not know whether to use them or not in an incident. I think that presenting feelings and using our emotions in our communicating style can be productive in most conditions.
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People
normally
try to communicate with each
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other
in everyday life trough
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different
ways.
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Sometimes
a person may
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show
its feels and
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emotions
to
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make
someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "understands", "understood".
understand
better or
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get
a specific message
indirectly
.
However
, there is a controversy between
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people
that
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
should present its
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emotion
openly
to
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other
individuals or not.
Personally
, I
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think
that everyone should have the ability to express its
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feelings
in society due to
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many
reasons which I support them
strongly
.

First
,
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presenting
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emotions
and
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feeling
may
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help
anyone to transfer his message
correctly
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because
, someone may not have the ability to completely
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told
his
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idea
in words.
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Emotions
will
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help
you to communicate with
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other
individuals
properly
. I believe it would be easier to know someone if that person present its
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emotions
to you
overtly
.
For example
, my
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friend
Jim
The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'had' and 'trouble'.
always had trouble
with others since they
mostly
misjudged him by his words and beliefs. It was
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so
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bad
that he
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started
seeing a shrink. His therapist
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told
him that he
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must
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show
his
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emotions
and
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feelings
about whatever he intended to talk about.
Surprisingly
, his problem
was decreased
radically
and his
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friends
found that they judged him
wrongly
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before
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only
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because
he could not
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use
the proper words for telling the massage right.

Secondly
, forcing yourself to
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hide
your
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feelings
and
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emotions
may harm you
seriously
in long-term without you knowing that you are doing damage to your soul
unintentionally
. Scientists have shown that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presenting
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emotions
may assist humans to put out their inside
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feelings
and anxieties which
were suppressed
during time
gradually
.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
we
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prevent
any person from showing its true
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emotions
this would lead to their sense of banishment from their surrounding environment.
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So
, they may become depressed and isolated.

Last
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but
not least,
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presenting
your inside to your
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friends
and family can
also
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help
you to revise yourself any
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different
occasions. You can
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show
a
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wrong
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emotion
in condition without understanding it.
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But
, your
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friends
and family can
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help
you by telling you that your reaction was not right in an especial situation which can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
you to control your
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emotions
and express them exactly
Did you mean "at the moment" (=currently)?
in the moment
it
was needed
.

In conclusion
,
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feelings
are
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some
things that
are shaped
inside us.
Usually
we do not know whether to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them or not in an incident. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presenting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feelings
and using our
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emotions
in our communicating style can be productive in most conditions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay : People should always show their strong emotions (such as excitement, anger, joy). Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
407 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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