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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have friends who are intelligent than to have friends who have a good sense of humor. v.365

It is better to have friends who are intelligent than to have friends who have a good sense of humor. v. 365
Many firms ought to offer some time for employees to do some exercises during the working day. In my opinion, exercise plays a key role in human health so it is crucial for companies to take into account the need for physical movement. Firstly, doing sports activities helps employees to reduce their stress and anxiety at work. This is a positive approach to relief their worries or emotions when they face issues in their duty, which also improves their productivity. Sometimes, it is possible that employees may find out the solution when they are doing sports. Additionally, if employees are allowed to utilize flexible hours to do sports, it shows their employers care about their well-being, which would increase high employees' morale in the companies. Secondly, team sports can foster a sense of cooperation when firms motivate their employees to participate in sports activities. This is also likely to cultivate the much stronger connection between employers and employees as well as creating a spirit of competition. Sometimes, colleagues can learn from what they experience during team sport and transfer the skills into be used in their jobs. Doing exercise at work not only maintains and improves employee's well-being, which also develops teamwork. In conclusion, people spend half of their life at work so many firms should take responsibilities for their employee's health. Providing exercise hours for employees could prevent physical or mental issues. If companies make time for sporting activities, it can help to build cooperation and team skills in the workforce through the spirit of competition.
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plays a key role in human health
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it is crucial for
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companies
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activities
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helps
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employees
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reduce
their
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stress
and anxiety at work. This is a
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positive
approach to relief their worries or emotions when they face issues in their duty, which
also
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improves
their productivity.
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may find out the solution when they are doing
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are
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to utilize flexible hours to do
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sports
, it
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shows
their employers care about their well-being, which would increase high employees' morale in the
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companies
.

Secondly
, team
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can foster a sense of cooperation when firms motivate their
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employees
to participate in
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sports
activities. This is
also
likely to cultivate the much stronger
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connection between
employers and
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employees
as well
as creating a spirit of competition.
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, colleagues can learn from what they experience during team
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sport
and transfer the
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skills
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used
in their jobs. Doing
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exercise
at work not
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maintains and
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improves
employee's well-being, which
also
develops teamwork.

In conclusion
,
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people
spend half of their life at work
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so
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many
firms should take responsibilities for their employee's health. Providing
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exercise
hours for
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employees
could
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prevent
physical or mental issues. If
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companies
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make
time for sporting activities, it can
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help
to build cooperation and team
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skills
in the workforce through the spirit of competition.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is better to have friends who are intelligent than to have friends who have a good sense of humor. v. 365

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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