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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v.1

: it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v. 1
There is no doubt that these days students are having varieties of courses to choose from, however the question: Should all students follow the same sequence of subjects or should they select by themselves? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that students should have a certain curriculum to follow without changes. The main reason for believing this is to give all of them the same chances in order to decide what they would like to be in the future as this will keep them on track through the last four years. Furthermore, it is also possible to say that seniors should study science courses as well as literature subjects, for instance: English, French, Physics, Chemistry and Business studies so they can have information in various fields. One good illustration of this is the education system in Canada that enforce all students to study the same courses from Grade one to ten so they can know their weaknesses and strengths carefully. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact there should be a free space for students to choose their courses, especially during the last two years of school. Moreover, people often have this opinion because abilities differ among students for instance: some of them excel in art courses, however, others do well at science courses, so they can choose which courses to select more. On the other hand, they should not neglect any field of study that might help them later at his university. A second point is that, if a student would like to study Engineering then he does not need to do politics or history courses in Grade 11 and 12, however, he has to focus on Physics and chemistry. In addition, some courses should be counted as an elective one such as, Physical Education and Visual Arts so this will let the student feel that he is not under pressure. A good example is the education system in Kuwait. Students are allowed to choose either science stream or art stream in Grade 10 so they can continue in years 11 and 12 with what they are good at. In conclusion, as what we have seen, there is no easy answer to this question, however, I tend to believe that students nowadays are open minded and should have more opportunities to decide their future as well as school courses. Each student can discover himself accordingly and build up his future.
There is no doubt that these days
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students
are having varieties of
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courses
to
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choose
from,
however
the question: Should all
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students
follow the same sequence of subjects or should they select by themselves? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that
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students
should have a certain curriculum to follow without
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changes
. The main reason for believing this is to give all of them the same chances in order to decide what they would like to be in the future as this will
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keep
them on
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track
through the last four years.
Furthermore
, it is
also
possible to say that seniors should
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study
science
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courses
as well
as literature subjects,
for instance
: English, French, Physics, Chemistry and Business
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studies
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so
they can have information in various fields. One
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good
illustration of this is the education system in Canada that enforce all
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students
to
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study
the same
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courses
from Grade one to ten
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so
they can know their weaknesses and strengths
carefully
.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact there should be a free space for
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students
to
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choose
their
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courses
,
especially
during the last two years of school.
Moreover
,
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people
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often
have this opinion
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because
abilities differ among
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students
for instance
:
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some
of them excel in art
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courses
,
however
, others do well at science
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courses
,
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so
they can
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choose
which
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courses
to select more.
On the other hand
, they should not neglect any field of
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study
that might
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help
them later at his university.

A second point is that, if a
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student
would like to
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study
Engineering then he does not need to do politics or history
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courses
in Grade 11 and 12,
however
, he
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has to
focus on Physics and chemistry.
In addition
,
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some
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courses
should
be counted
as an elective one such as, Physical Education and Visual Arts
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so
this will
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let
the
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student
feel that he is not under pressure. A
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good
example is the education system in Kuwait.
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Students
are
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allowed
to
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choose
either science stream or art stream in Grade 10
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so
they can continue in years 11 and 12 with what they are
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good
at.

In conclusion
, as what we have
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seen
, there is no easy answer to this question,
however
, I tend to believe that
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students
nowadays are
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open minded
and should have more opportunities to decide their future
as well
as school
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courses
. Each
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student
can discover himself
accordingly
and build up his future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay : it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
440 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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