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Some people prefer to get up early and work in the morning. Others prefer to get up late and work until late at night. What do you prefer. Give reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to get up early and work in the morning. Others prefer to get up late and work until late at night. What do you prefer. Give reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
Nations worldwide, children are dealing with the increasing issue of overweight. This concern for all ages, particularly children. There are two main causes, consumption of fast food and laziness in doing exercise. Possible solutions would control diet by their parents and school and encourage them into physical activities or outdoor activities. One of the main reasons that children are becoming overweight is consumption of fast food. This is because kids are very busy to study and in a few minutes to take a break, they usually eat all foods which can get a take away such as ready meals at the supermarket to eat and go back to study. For example, my younger sister is in the eleventh grade, after learning at school until 5 pm, she has a lesson at half past 5 pm, so she has to eat convenience meals rather than cooks healthy meals at home because of saving a lot of time. To tackle this issue parents ought to control diet by cooking meals and bring to them. Therefore, children are provided with enough fat and necessary nutrition, which could lead to them losing weight. Another problem to consider is laziness in doing exercise. Nowadays, children are addicted to using modern devices such as smart phone or laptop to play games, watch films and chat with friends instead of doing physical activities. For instance, the radiation of these devices can harm for their health and brand and make your brand become lazier in thinking. This leads to flabby muscle and accumulate excess fat in their body every day. One possible solution is that parents and schools should encourage them to join in physical club and run 30 minutes in every morning. As a result, doing it regularly can maintain a well-balanced life as well as keep fit. In a nutshell, obesity increasingly develops because of fast food consumption and laziness in doing exercise. The solutions are control of diet by parents and school and encourage them into physical activities. It is suggested that parents and schools should hand in hand to keep children’s body fit and stay healthy.
Nations worldwide,
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children
are dealing with the increasing issue of overweight. This concern for all ages,
particularly
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children
. There are two main causes, consumption of
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fast
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food
and laziness in
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doing
exercise. Possible solutions would control diet by their
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parents
and
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school
and encourage them into
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physical
activities or outdoor activities.

One of the main reasons that
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children
are becoming overweight is consumption of
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fast
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food
. This is
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because
kids are
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very
busy to study and in a few minutes to take a break, they
usually
eat all
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foods
which can
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get
a
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take away
such as ready
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meals
at the supermarket to eat and go back to study.
For example
, my younger sister is in the eleventh grade, after learning at
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school
until 5 pm, she has a lesson at half past 5 pm,
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so
she
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has to
eat convenience
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meals
rather
than cooks healthy
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meals
at home
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because
of saving
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a lot of
time. To tackle this issue
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parents
ought to control diet by cooking
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meals
and bring to them.
Therefore
,
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children
are provided
with
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enough
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fat
and necessary nutrition, which could lead to them losing weight.

Another problem to consider is laziness in
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doing
exercise. Nowadays,
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children
are addicted
to using modern devices such as smart phone or laptop to play games,
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watch
films and chat with friends
instead
of
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doing
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physical
activities.
For instance
, the radiation of these devices can harm for their health and brand and
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make
your brand become lazier in thinking. This leads to flabby muscle and accumulate excess
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fat
in their body every day. One possible solution is that
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parents
and
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schools
should encourage them to
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join
in
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physical
club and run 30 minutes in every morning.
As a result
,
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doing
it
regularly
can maintain a well-balanced life
as well
as
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keep
fit.

In a nutshell, obesity
increasingly
develops
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because
of
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fast
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food
consumption and laziness in
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doing
exercise. The solutions are control of diet by
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parents
and
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school
and encourage them into
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physical
activities. It
is suggested
that
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parents
and
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schools
should hand in hand to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
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children’s
body fit and stay healthy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to get up early and work in the morning. Others prefer to get up late and work until late at night. What do you prefer. Give reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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