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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v.2

: it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v. 2
The professionals should be prepared with a wide variety of knowledge. It is impressive to find a person who graduate from a college and besides his or her major is able to talk about different topics. There are many people who consider that universities should focus only on the classes related with the students' field, I don' t agree with that. I' m concurred upon the fact that professionals should know a little about each topic. I based my arguments in some reasons that I will develop in the next paragraphs. First of all, students might get better jobs if they have knowledge about different topics. It is very sad that a professional can only claim opinions about matters related with his or her field. This for sure will disqualify anyone who is applying for a job. In a job interview, for instance individuals who can express their point about different topics are the ones who always impress managers. Inasmuch as the technologic develop, students will need more knowledge to compete with other individuals for job positions. Social status is another aspect related with students who graduate from universities that offer a wide variety of classes. As a matter of fact, people ignore subjects who cannot express well, and even who don' t have a good professional level. Therefore, money is not enough to define a person with a good position, now the story has taken a different route. Due to the fact that most people attended to university and have degrees, today it is most important to be considered as a wise professional who knows about everything. In addition, the professional represent the university from where he or she graduated. If a person who graduated from a well known university is not working ethically, and is causing problems, this might harm the university where this person came. People will blame the University for the Subject’s Behaviors. Also, the opposite might happen if the professional has a good performance with his or her activities, it will benefit the university. To sum up, I consider that universities should offer a wide variety of classes to students because in this way students might get better jobs, might have a better social status, and will display a better image of the university.
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professionals
should
be prepared
with a wide variety of knowledge. It is impressive to find a
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person
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who
graduate from a college and
besides
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his or her
major is able to talk about
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different
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topics
. There are
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many
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people
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who
consider that
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universities
should focus
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only
on the classes related with the
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students&
#039; field, I
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don&
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agree
with that.
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#039; m concurred upon the fact that
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professionals
should know a
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little
about each
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topic
. I based my arguments in
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some
reasons that I will develop in the
next
paragraphs.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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students
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might
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get
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better
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jobs
if they have knowledge about
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different
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topics
. It is
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very
sad that a
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professional
can
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only
claim opinions about matters related with
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his or her
field. This for sure will disqualify anyone
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who
is applying for a
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job
. In a
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job
interview,
for instance
individuals
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who
can express their point about
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different
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topics
are the ones
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who
always impress managers. Inasmuch as the
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technologic
develop,
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students
will need more knowledge to compete with other individuals for
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job
positions.

Social status is another aspect related with
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students
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who
graduate from
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universities
that offer a wide variety of classes. As a matter of fact,
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people
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ignore
subjects
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who
cannot express well, and even
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who
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don&
#039; t have a
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good
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professional
level.
Therefore
, money is not
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enough
to define a
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person
with a
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good
position,
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now
the story has taken a
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different
route. Due to the fact that most
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people
attended to
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university
and have degrees,
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today
it is most
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important
to
be considered
as a wise
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professional
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who
knows about everything.

In addition
, the
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professional
represent the
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university
from where he or she graduated. If a
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person
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who
graduated from a well known
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university
is not working
ethically
, and is causing problems, this
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might
harm the
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university
where this
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person
came.
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People
will blame the
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University
for the Subject’s Behaviors.
Also
, the opposite
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might
happen if the
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professional
has a
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good
performance with
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his or her
activities, it will benefit the university.

To sum up, I consider that
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universities
should offer a wide variety of classes to
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students
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because
in this way
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students
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might
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get
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better
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jobs
,
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might
have a
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better
social status, and will display a
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better
image of the
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university
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay : it is better for university students to first get a general education, taking classes in many fields, than is for them to take clases only in their own field of study. Use details and examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
379 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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