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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should encourage their children to learn a second language from early childhood. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v.778

Parents should encourage their children to learn a second language from early childhood. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 778
It is generally stated that we live in an era which is called information age. Communication tools such as satellite and the internet have brought the people in the world much closer to each other and nowadays people all over the world can be informed of every news, events or science advances in a fraction of a second which occurs even at the farthest corners of of the plant. It seems that we all live in village and that' s why the world is called global village. To become successful and rise to prominence in this worldwide village, everybody needs to communicate perfectly with the other people in the world or as it was mentioned the global village. Germane to this fact, a question that is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether learning a second language in childhood is essential or not. Although some parents might think that mother tongue is enough for their children, I' m personally on the conviction that it is absolutely necessary to learn a second language from childhood to live in this global village. To start out with in an internationally growing economy, communication with companies from other countries has a significant role in making money and to get a bigger part in worldwide trading it is essential to be capable of talking with people from other countries. Learning a second language seems to be required for every applicant who want to start out their career and that can bring them much more opportunities not only in their very own country but also all across the globe. Further more many students wants to study in well-known universities in the world so they can get better job positions later and it is evident that learning another tongue in their childhood can make this much easier for them. Consequently learning a second language will open a path for everybody in the global village to follow their dreams professionally or educationally in each country of the world they please. Another point which is equally important, if not more, is that education is key of success in every occupation. In recent days, there are a wide variety of internet resources about lots of jobs and everyone in world can use these adjunct educational videos to become a professional in every aspect they desire. It is apparent that for understanding and applying these internet resources in every profession, people must be able to comprehend an international language and the necessity of learning a second language is clear-cut for this purpose. As a result, with these available resources, the lack of formal education systems can be covered for everyone who has a goal of accomplishing success. However it might not be acceptable by all, because some people believe that using another language will affect the youth and their own culture might be affected by the other languages and cultures and the style of their living will badly change. Becoming successful is a dream of every parent all around the plant for their children and teaching their kids a second language is precious gift from parents to the children for their future life which can open a hatch of opportunities for them later in adult life. And as a graduate student who can speak and communicate in other languages, I feel so confident and positive about settling abroad and working outside of my county.
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generally
stated that we
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live
in an era which
is called
information age. Communication tools such as satellite and the internet have brought the
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people
in the
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world
much closer to each
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other
and nowadays
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people
all over the
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world
can
be informed
of every news,
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events
or science advances in a fraction of a second which occurs even at the farthest corners
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of of
the plant. It seems that we all
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live
in
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village
and
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that&
#039; s why the
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world
is called
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global
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village
. To become successful and rise to prominence in this worldwide
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village
, everybody needs to communicate
perfectly
with the
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other
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people
in the
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world
or as it
was mentioned
the
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global
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village
. Germane to this fact, a question
that is
matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether
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learning
a second
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language
in childhood is essential or not. Although
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some
parents might
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think
that mother tongue is
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enough
for their children,
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I&
#039; m
personally
on the conviction that it is
absolutely
necessary to learn a second
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language
from childhood to
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live
in this
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global
village.

To
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start
out with in an
internationally
growing economy, communication with
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companies
from
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other
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countries
has a significant role in making money and to
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get
a bigger part in worldwide trading it is essential to be capable of talking with
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people
from
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other
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countries
.
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Learning
a second
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language
seems to
be required
for every applicant who want to
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start
out their career and that can bring them much more opportunities not
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only
in their
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very
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own
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country
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but
also
all across the globe.
Further
more
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many
students wants to study in well-known universities in the
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world
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so
they can
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get
better job positions later and it is evident that
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learning
another tongue in their childhood can
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make
this much easier for them.
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Consequently
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learning
a second
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language
will open a path for everybody in the
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global
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village
to follow their dreams
professionally
or
educationally
in each
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country
of the
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world
they
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please
.

Another point which is
equally
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important
, if not more, is that education is key of success in every occupation. In recent days, there are a wide variety of internet resources about lots of jobs and everyone in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
can
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use
these adjunct educational videos to become a professional in every aspect they desire. It is apparent that for understanding and applying these internet resources in every profession,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be able to comprehend an international
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language
and the necessity of
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learning
a second
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language
is
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clear
-
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cut
for this purpose.
As a result
, with these available resources, the lack of formal education systems can
be covered
for everyone who has a goal of accomplishing success.
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However
it might not be acceptable by all,
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because
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some
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people
believe that using another
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language
will affect the youth and their
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own
culture might be
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affected
by the
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other
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languages
and cultures and the style of their living will
badly
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change
.

Becoming successful is a dream of every parent all around the plant for their children and teaching their kids a second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
is precious gift from parents to the children for their future life which can open a hatch of opportunities for them later in adult life. And as a graduate student who can speak and communicate in
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other
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languages
, I feel
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so
confident and
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positive
about settling abroad and working
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outside of
my county.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Parents should encourage their children to learn a second language from early childhood. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 778

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
564 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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