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It is more important at a job that you enjoy, even if the salary is low, Than it is to have a high-paying job that you do not enjoy. v.1

It is more important at a job that you enjoy, even if the salary is low, Than it is to have a high-paying job that you do not enjoy. v. 1
Everyone want to enjoy their life but sometimes they have to live life according to the situations. Sometimes situations do not help them to do what they want to do. Everyone have goals, hobies, dreams but some can achieve their dreams but others can not. Some do their work in their interests but others have to do according to the situations. Some have to concentrate on money by leaving aside their dreams and hobbies. I support that it is more important to have a high-paying job that you do not enjoy than to work at a job that you enjoy, even if the salary is low. In today' s world money is a major factor. We can not live happily if we do not have enough wealth. We have to compromise with our choices, living standards or sometimes dreams also. If we are working in a high paying job, we have so many benefits. We can live life easily without worrying about money factor. Our living standard will be high. We can use many facilities. We can save more amount moeny more future. We can also invest some money in mutual funds or share market. We do not have to compromise on dreams due to money. Consider the case, if one is enjoying doing painting. So he/she decided to be a drawing teacher. But he/she is not getting enough money Other he/she does not like engineering but he/she decided to do it for bright future and he/she gets job in high-paying company. Life is beautiful for both but second one does not have to worry about money. If we are not interest in a work but we have to do. We can do whatever our hobbies in free time. We can also do on weekends to make also money from them. Some times working in not interested field feels like tedious but we have to do due to other benefits. SO people continue their work if they are not enjoying. They start finding way to make it interesting or rather they start to loving their work and do hardwork in them. If our salary is low but we are enjoying than it is good in view of happiness. We are satisfied with our work that we are doing what we have dreamed. But we always have to worry about money. Money becomes major worry in our day to day life. We can' t invest much money for future. According to me, it is better to work at high paying job if we are not enjoying it because it has so many benefits. We can other works in free time which we are enjoying. We can start taking interest in our job and make it enjoyable.
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they
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live
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life
according to the situations.
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situations do not
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help
them to do what they want to do. Everyone
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have
goals,
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hobies
,
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dreams
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but
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some
can achieve their
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others can not.
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do their
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work
in their interests
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others
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have to
do according to the situations.
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concentrate on
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money
by leaving aside their
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dreams
and hobbies.

I support that it is more
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important
to have a high-paying
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job
that you do not enjoy than to
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work
at a
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job
that you enjoy, even if the salary is low. In
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today&
#039; s world
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money
is a major factor. We can not
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live
happily
if we do not have
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enough
wealth. We
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have to
compromise with our choices, living
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standards


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or
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sometimes
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dreams
also
. If we are working in a high paying
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job
, we have
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so
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many
benefits. We
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can


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live
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life
easily
without worrying about
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money
factor. Our living standard will be high. We can
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use


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many
facilities. We can save more amount
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moeny
more future. We can
also
invest
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some
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money
in
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mutual


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funds
or share market. We do not
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have to
compromise on
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dreams
due to
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money
. Consider the case, if
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one


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is
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enjoying
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doing painting
.
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So
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he/she
decided to be a drawing teacher.
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he/she
is not
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getting


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enough
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money
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Other
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he/she
does not like engineering
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but
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he/she
decided to do it for bright
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future and
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he/she
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gets
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job
in high-paying
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company
.

Life is
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beautiful
for both
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but
second one does not
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have to
worry about
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money
. If we are not interest in a
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work
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but
we
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do.

We can do whatever our hobbies in free time. We can
also
do on weekends to
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make
also
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money
from them.

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Some
times working in not interested field feels like tedious
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but
we
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have to
do due to other

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benefits
.
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SO
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people
continue their
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work
if they are not
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enjoying
. They
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start
finding way to
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make


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it
interesting or
rather
they
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start
to loving their
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work
and do
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hardwork
in them.

If our salary is low
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but
we are
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enjoying
than it is
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good
in view of happiness. We are
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satisfied


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with
our
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work
that we are doing what we have dreamed.
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we always
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have to
worry about money.

Money becomes major worry in our
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day to day
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life
. We
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#039; t invest much
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money
for future.

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, it is better to
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work
at high paying
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job
if we are not
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enjoying
it
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because


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it
has
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so
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many
benefits. We can
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other
works in free time which we are
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enjoying
. We can
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start
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taking


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interest
in our
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job
and
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make
it enjoyable.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important at a job that you enjoy, even if the salary is low, Than it is to have a high-paying job that you do not enjoy. v. 1

Essay
  American English
19 paragraphs
455 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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