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A second language is regarded as essential to success in the modern world. It should be a compulsory for all children to study a second language as soon as they start school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

A second language is regarded as essential to success in the modern world. It should be a compulsory for all children to study a second language as soon as they start school. with this opinion? v. 1
It is argued that schools must teach kids a second language once they start school because it is essential to be able to read, write, speak and listen in a different language from our mother tongue in order to progress in present-time. This essay totally agrees with that statement because young ones can learn different languages much faster than adults and also most jobs require knowing a second tongue. Kids have the ability of learning idioms in an impressive and swift way. Our brains have the capacity of learning an endless number of languages at the same time, but from ages 3 to 10 our brain’s neural network are spouting more rapidly and as a consequence we need less repetitions in sounds or words so as to learn languages. For example, Oxford university recently reported that kids between 3 and 10 years old need only 4 repetitions of sounds or words for memorizing the word or sound. Another reason why being bilingual is fundamental is because in most jobs is indispensable to be able to communicate in two different languages. We are living in societies where is very common to interact each day with people of different nationalities. For instance, recent research shows that there are at least 3 different customers that go every day for a coffee to the international coffee shop called ‘Starbucks’ whose mother tongue is different from the cashier. Therefore, it is necessary to speak English so as to get a job at Starbucks. To conclude, kids should learn another language at school because they can learn it in a short period of time and in present times even in the simplest job is inevitable not to speak another language.
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language
once they
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start
school
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it is essential to be able to read, write, speak and listen in a
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different
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language
from our mother tongue in order to progress in present-time. This essay
totally
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agrees
with that statement
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because
young ones can
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learn
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different
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languages
much faster than adults and
also
most
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jobs
require knowing a second tongue.

Kids have the ability of learning idioms in an impressive and swift way. Our brains have the capacity of learning an endless number of
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languages
at the same time,
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from ages 3 to 10 our brain’s neural network are spouting more
rapidly
and as a consequence we need
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less
repetitions in sounds or words
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so as to
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learn
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languages
.
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, Oxford university recently reported that kids between 3 and 10 years
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need
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only
4 repetitions of sounds or words for memorizing the word or sound.

Another reason why being bilingual is fundamental is
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because
in most
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jobs
is indispensable to be able to communicate in two
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different
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languages
. We are living in societies where is
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very
common to interact each day with
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people
of
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different
nationalities.
For instance
, recent research
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shows
that there are at least 3
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different
customers that go every day for a coffee to the international coffee shop called ‘Starbucks’ whose mother tongue is
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different
from the cashier.
Therefore
, it is necessary to speak English
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so as to
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get
a
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job
at Starbucks.

To conclude
, kids should
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learn
another
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language
at school
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because
they can
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learn
it in a short period of time and in present times even in the simplest
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job
is inevitable not to speak another
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language
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
The joy of knowing a foreign language is inexpressible. I find it really difficult to express such joy in my mother tongue.
Munia Khan

IELTS essay A second language is regarded as essential to success in the modern world. It should be a compulsory for all children to study a second language as soon as they start school. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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