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The pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v.2

The pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 2
The bar chart and table illustrates the information about total import of fish from United States through China, Canada and others and its entire value between 1998 to 2002 at four and eight years interval. Overall, it is clearly seen that Canada imported fish 60 % which is overwhelming quantity in 1988 while, china and other imported on 13 % and 27 % respectively. Regarding the table of 1988, total value of fish import was 6. 57 Billion Dollars. Although, in 1992, Canada dropped their value 24% but, in the mean time, China and other step up their import and reach 20 % and 46 %. Even though, amount of Dollars also enhances marginally with almost 02 Billion Dollars. Lastly, Canada and others decreased their level off by slightly difference. Whereas, china steeply increased 10 % in 2000, wherein, the value of Dollar raised also more than the last year. To end, the bar chart demonstrated that the China and other significantly expanded their % howbeit, Canada decreased their level off
The bar chart and table illustrates the information about total import of fish
A determiner is probably missing here: "from the United States".
from United States
through China, Canada
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and others
and its entire
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value
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1998 and 2002".
between 1998 to 2002
at four and eight years interval.

Overall
, it is
clearly
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seen
that Canada imported fish 60 % which is overwhelming quantity in 1988 while, china and
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other
imported on 13 % and 27 %
respectively
. Regarding the table of 1988, total
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value
of fish import was 6. 57 Billion
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Dollars
. Although, in 1992, Canada dropped their
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value
24%
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but
, in the
Did you mean "meantime" (=the period of time between two things)?
mean time
, China and
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other
step up their import and reach 20 % and 46 %.
Even though
, amount of
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Dollars
also
enhances
marginally
with almost 02 Billion
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Dollars
.
Lastly
, Canada
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and others
decreased their level off by
slightly
difference. Whereas, china
steeply
increased 10 % in 2000, wherein, the
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value
of
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Dollar
raised
also
more than the last year.

To
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end
, the bar chart demonstrated that the China and
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other
significantly
expanded their % howbeit, Canada decreased their level off
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
170 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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