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Some people are very organized, while other people are not so organized. Which type of person are you? Support your respopnse with specific example. v.1

Some people are very organized, while other people are not so organized. Which type of person are you? Support your respopnse with specific example. v. 1
Both being quite orginazed and being relaxed can be possible for a person in life. However, instead of being organized, being relaxed is not my cup of tea. Thus, I prefer being organized and well ordered as it provides being succesful, I like creating plans and applying them and I dislike spontaneous actions. Success has always been my destination throughout my life. However, I believe that without being well organized, it is not possible to achieve. If I organize my stuffs and arrange my program in order, then it is more clear to realize the way going to destination. Additionally, it saves time since the steps are known. Time consumption decreases thank to organizing. Therefore, obtaining the success becomes more clear. For example, I usually have to create some projects form y courses. Therefore, planning and organizing the order of steps are vital for a strong project. However, What if I don’t arrange my program and steps of the projet? Then, a stunning output never exists. Eventually, being organized is significant for clear and succesful consequences. Moreover, one of my hobbies are planning something for future and obtain them in life. I plan my program before weeks of the date of it. After fixing it, the preparation commences to be occured and all the needs for the program are supplied orderly. Therefore, up to date of the program, everthing is ready to be done and we just enjoy. Last year in winter, we decided to go for skiing to a mountain. However, we didn’t know how to prepare ourselves. I searched for it and found out what we needed. After arrangement, we enjoyed skiing instead of freezing in the snow. Finally, spontaneous actions are abysmal for me since I don’t like surprises. I feel nervous if I have to cope with a situation that I don’t feel ready about. Even it is something light or easy and I am able to challenge it, I, indeed, fail as I feel nervous. Nevertheless, if I had some preparations or infrasutracture about the subject, I believe I can challenge it. Therefore, being organized is affecting considerably my way of life. On the whole, it is crucial to be organized before commencing a subject for process of it. As being succesful is easier, I love creating plans and I dislike unpredictibility I prefer being organized.
Both being quite
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orginazed
and
being relaxed
can be possible for a person in life.
However
,
instead
of being
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organized
,
being relaxed
is not my cup of tea.
Thus
, I prefer being
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organized
and
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well ordered
as it provides being
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succesful
, I like creating plans and applying them and I dislike spontaneous actions.

Success has always been my destination throughout my life.
However
, I believe that without being well
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organized
, it is not possible to achieve. If I organize my stuffs and arrange my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
in order, then it is more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
to realize the way going to destination.
Additionally
, it saves time since the steps
are known
. Time consumption decreases thank to organizing.
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Therefore
, obtaining the success becomes more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
.
For example
, I
usually
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have to
create
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some
projects
Did you mean "for my"?
form y
courses.
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Therefore
, planning and organizing the order of steps are vital for a strong project.
However
, What if I don’t arrange my
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program
and steps of the
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projet
? Then, a stunning output never exists.
Eventually
, being
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organized
is significant for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
and
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succesful
consequences.

Moreover
, one of my hobbies are planning something for future and obtain them in life. I plan my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
weeks of the date of it. After fixing it, the preparation commences to be
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occured
and all the needs for the
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program
are supplied
orderly.
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Therefore
, up to date of the
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program
,
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everthing
is ready to be
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done and
we
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just
enjoy. Last year in winter, we decided to go for skiing to a mountain.
However
, we didn’t know how to prepare ourselves. I searched for it and found out what we needed. After arrangement, we enjoyed skiing
instead
of freezing in the snow.

Finally
, spontaneous actions are abysmal for me since I don’t like surprises. I feel nervous if I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
cope with a situation that I don’t feel ready about. Even it is something light or
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
easy and
I am able to challenge it, I,
indeed
, fail as I feel nervous.
Nevertheless
, if I had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
preparations or
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infrasutracture
about the subject, I believe I can challenge it.
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Therefore
, being
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organized
is affecting
considerably
my way of life.

On the whole
, it is crucial to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organized
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
commencing a subject for process of it. As being
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succesful
is easier, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
creating plans and I dislike
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unpredictibility
I prefer being
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organized
.
23Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people are very organized, while other people are not so organized. Which type of person are you? Support your respopnse with specific example. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
391 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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