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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When teacher assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. v.760

When teacher assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. v. 760
From the down side of humanity, working together and having a team due to the social life has been increased and extended among of people, which is much talked about not only by sociologists but also by open- minder citizens. Consequently, working with group for promoting our social skills is a very important hotspot in every individual' s life. It is hard to reach a consensus about whether students must work together or alone on their projects. In my own prospective, the statement is true, as a matter of fact, I agree with this idea and I will explicate my reasons through the following paragraphs. To commence, the first exquisite point that deserves to be mentioned is that students learn and practice their team working skills. To illustrate the concept that explained, in a team, students learn to share responsibilities, to increase their sense of their tolerance. For example, when I was at university, I and my friends had a team and tried to work on their project in our team. First of all we defined some roles such as leader, assistant, informative, and etc. After that besides on our personalities and the topic of project, we assigned the roles with certain tasks to each other. As a result, we had to do our duties whit out any delay or excuse; we had to be responsible for our roles. In addition, we learned to respect each other and improved our sense of tolerance in front of opposite view. Hence, working in a group was so useful for all us. Another equally reasons why I agree with this statement is that students can find new friends and have fun with each other. Moreover, students do their projects more efficiently by work with other students, due to they can ask their questions and gain new ideas in order to solve their problems. Noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, revealed by a recently social research, demonstrated that most of successful students doing their projects in a group, and they fortify their social skills. In addition, after graduating they can employee as a manager in a big company due to their experiences at university. To wrap it up, based on the aforementioned argument team working is an essential skill for students in order to success at their study and work, but that was the story in a nutshell; actually there some reasons and examples, challenging the claims, which are not mentioned above. I firmly recommend that universities plan to have a course for students, that they learn everything about team working.
From the
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down side
of humanity,
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working
together and having a
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team
due to the
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social
life has
been increased
and extended among of
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people
, which is much talked about not
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only
by sociologists
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but
also
by open- minder citizens.
Consequently
,
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working
with group for promoting our
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social
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skills
is a
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very
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important
hotspot in every
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hard
to reach a consensus about whether
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students
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must
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work
together or alone on their
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projects
. In my
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own
prospective, the statement is true, as a matter of fact, I
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agree
with this
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idea
and I will explicate my reasons through the following paragraphs.

To commence, the
first
exquisite point that deserves to
be mentioned
is that
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students
learn and practice their
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team
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working
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skills
. To illustrate the concept that
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explained
, in a
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team
,
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students
learn to share responsibilities, to increase their sense of their tolerance.
For example
, when I was at university, I and my friends had a
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team
and tried to
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work
on their
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project
in our
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team
.
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First of all
we defined
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some
roles such as leader, assistant, informative,
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and etc
. After that
besides
on our personalities and the topic of
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project
, we assigned the roles with certain tasks to each
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other
.
As a result
, we had to do our duties whit out any delay or excuse; we had to be responsible for our roles.
In addition
, we learned to respect each
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other
and
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improved
our sense of tolerance in front of opposite view.
Hence
,
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working
in a group was
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so
useful for all us.

Another
equally
reasons why I
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agree
with this statement is that
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students
can find new friends and have fun with each
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other
.
Moreover
,
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students
do their
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projects
more
efficiently
by
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work
with
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other
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students
, due to they can ask their questions and gain new
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ideas
in order to solve their problems. Noteworthy
refreshingly
intelligible statistics, revealed by a recently
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social
research, demonstrated that most of successful
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students
doing their
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projects
in a group, and they fortify their
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social
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skills
.
In addition
, after graduating they
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can employee
as a manager in a
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big
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company
due to their experiences at university.

To wrap it up, based on the aforementioned argument
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team
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working
is an essential
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skill
for
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students
in order to success at their study and
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work
,
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but
that was the story in a nutshell; actually there
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some
reasons and examples, challenging the claims, which are not mentioned above. I
firmly
recommend that universities plan to have a course for
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students
, that they learn everything about
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team
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working
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay When teacher assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. v. 760

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
425 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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