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In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v.2

In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v. 2
These days, almost countries produce the big amount of rubbish, which affects environment and human health negatively. However, most people do not reuse their garbage, so this situation becomes more critical. There are a number of reasons why people do not recycle their rubbish. Firstly, people do not have enough time to do this. They are always busy with very many works such as earning money, doing housework, taking care of their children. Therefore, maybe, they cannot many things they want and they also need to take a rest. The second reason is people become to lazy. They like convenience and therefore they prefer to use something once and throw away. They spend much more time on entertainment, work and study than recycling rubbish, because they think it is not necessary. Moreover, the main reason is that people are not aware of effect of rubbish on environment. They do not know about that rubbish is the cause of air and water pollution and it brings many illnesses. There are some solutions to solve this situation. First of all, government should educate general public about some harms rubbish brings. With the big amount of rubbish, it will causes to pollute environment seriously, damage ecosystem and make viruses develop fast. Moreover, the cost of waste treatment is very expensive, so every citizen should be responsible for their rubbish. They should recycle their garbage as much as they could in order to bring benefits for themselves and society. Reusing rubbish help them not only protect environment but also save money. All in all, if government could change attitude of general public about rubbish and importance of recycling rubbish, this situation will be solved in the fast way.
These days, almost countries produce the
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big
amount of
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rubbish
, which affects
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environment
and human health
negatively
.
However
, most
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people
do not reuse their garbage,
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so
this situation becomes more critical.

There are a number of reasons why
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people
do not recycle their
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rubbish
.
Firstly
,
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people
do not have
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enough
time to do this. They are always busy with
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very
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many
works such as earning money, doing housework, taking care of their children.
Therefore
, maybe, they cannot
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many
things they
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want and
they
also
need to take a rest. The second reason is
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people
become to lazy. They like convenience and
therefore
they prefer to
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use
something once and throw away. They spend much more time on entertainment, work and study than recycling
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rubbish
,
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because
they
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think
it is not necessary.
Moreover
, the main reason is that
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people
are not aware of effect of
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rubbish
on
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environment
. They do not know about that
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rubbish
is the cause of air and water pollution and it brings
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many
illnesses.

There are
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some
solutions to solve this situation.
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,
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government
should educate
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general public
about
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some
harms
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rubbish
brings. With the
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big
amount of
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rubbish
, it will
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causes
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to pollute
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environment
seriously
, damage ecosystem and
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make
viruses develop
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fast
.
Moreover
, the cost of waste treatment is
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very
expensive,
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so
every citizen should be responsible for their
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rubbish
. They should recycle their garbage as much as they could in order to bring benefits for themselves and society. Reusing
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rubbish
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help
them not
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only
protect
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environment
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but
also
save money.

All in all, if
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government
could
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change
attitude of
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general public
about
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rubbish
and importance of recycling
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rubbish
, this situation will
be solved
in the
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fast
way.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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