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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. People in the today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. v.74

People in the today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. v. 74
Colleges and universities are often referred to as educational, as well as skill-enhancement, hub. Students enrol in colleges in order to acquire knowledge, which enhances their future career prospects. However, there are other reasons why many attend colleges. The majority of people attend universities to pursue their higher education, which gears up their opportunities in the job market. Likewise, many have a far greater goal in their lives and in order to reach their heights, they choose colleges. A college or university acts as the main basement for enlightened people. A great revolution has already occurred in the field of technology, and that is correlated with the job market. Students seemed to join colleges in order to attain knowledge, which creates avenues for their dream jobs. Moreover, exposure to the social world is the primary constraint for a student, and the best place to develop such skills is none other than Colleges. Colleges inculcate social behaviour of the students and provide a wide range of facilities that allow an individual to enhance skills. Some students join a college or university for social status, and some who join from family pressure may also get good career guidance under the roof of colleges from the experienced faculty who guides them how to develop their profile to match the desired target. In my opinion, the college environment acts as a precursor to a student’s successful career, and that is the reason many pupils join in colleges or universities to make their future dream come true.
Colleges and
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universities
are
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referred to as educational,
as well
as
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skill
-enhancement, hub.
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Students
enrol in colleges in order to acquire knowledge, which enhances their future career prospects.
However
, there are other reasons why
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many
attend colleges.

The majority of
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people
attend
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universities
to pursue their higher education, which gears up their opportunities in the job market.
Likewise
,
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many
have a far greater goal in their
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lives
and in order to reach their heights, they choose colleges. A college or
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university
acts as the main basement for enlightened
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people
. A great revolution has already occurred in the field of technology, and that
is correlated
with the job market.
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Students
seemed to
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join
colleges in order to attain knowledge, which creates avenues for their dream jobs.

Moreover
, exposure to the social world is the primary constraint for a
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student
, and the best place to develop such
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skills
is none other than Colleges. Colleges inculcate social
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behaviour
of the
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students
and provide a wide range of facilities that
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allow
an individual to enhance
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skills
.
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Some
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students
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join
a college or
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university
for social status, and
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some
who
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join
from family pressure may
also
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get
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good
career guidance under the roof of colleges from the experienced faculty who guides them how to develop their profile to match the desired target.

In my opinion, the college environment acts as a precursor to a
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student’s
successful career, and
that is
the reason
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many
pupils
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join
in colleges or
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universities
to
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make
their future dream
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come
true.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People in the today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. v. 74

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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