Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. v.671
People who benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. v. 671
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of traveling. Some people may hold the opinion that it is better for people to travel in own country. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, obviously, if people have a trip to another country, they learn many new things, have wider culture and more relationship and communication. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints.
First let us look at what a person can gain by a journy to foreign country. Learning new things about other countries such as their foods, their historical buildings and their natures is essential for everyone because by getting more and more information, people will have wider mind. By way of illustration, when I traveled to Italy last year, I learn many new culinaries including pitazas and pastas.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Each country has special culture and if people see other cultures, they can improve own culture and nothing is important for one country as culture is. Taking asian countries for example, there are many countries in south asia that had lower culture in the past but today thanks to traveling to developed country they have invaluable culture among their own people.
Finally, I cannot oversee the fact that going to different country means more relationships and better commuinication. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study done in Tehran University, people who travel to another country communicate with other people easier, and all of them thanks to having more realtionship are more able to get a good position in their jobs, and also, they have happeir life than others who travel only in thier own country. In other hand, peolpe who travel only in their own country have less chance in career and have less ability in social activity than other groups.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benefits of traveling abroad is much better because they bring wider culture for people and also, they can learn more and experience more relationship.
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of traveling.
Some
people
may hold the opinion that it is better for
people
to
travel
in
own
country
.
But
others have a
negative
attitude. As far as I
am concerned
,
obviously
, if
people
have a trip to another
country
, they learn
many
new things, have wider
culture
and more relationship and communication. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints.
First
let
us look at what a person can gain by a
journy
to foreign
country
. Learning new things about
other
countries
such as their foods, their historical buildings and their natures is essential for everyone
because
by getting more and more information,
people
will have wider mind. By way of illustration, when I traveled to Italy last year, I learn
many
new
culinaries
including
pitazas
and pastas.
There is
also
a more subtle point we
must
consider. Each
country
has special
culture
and if
people
see
other
cultures
, they can
improve
own
culture
and nothing is
important
for one
country
as
culture
is. Taking
asian
countries
for example
, there are
many
countries
in
south asia
that had lower
culture
in the past
but
today
thanks to traveling to developed
country
they have invaluable
culture
among their
own
people
.
Finally
, I cannot oversee the fact that going to
different
country
means more relationships and better
commuinication
. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study done in Tehran University,
people
who
travel
to another
country
communicate with
other
people
easier, and all of them thanks to having more
realtionship
are more able to
get
a
good
position in their jobs, and
also
, they have
happeir
life than others who
travel
only
in
thier
own
country
. In
other
hand,
peolpe
who
travel
only
in their
own
country
have less chance in career and have less ability in social activity than
other
groups.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always
some
exceptions which
are excluded
from the general
rule
, I do
agree
that the benefits of traveling abroad is much better
because
they bring wider
culture
for
people
and
also
, they can learn more and experience more relationship.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes