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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.663

Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 663
In spite of the fact that there are numerous prosperous persons who have just one parent in the society, all children should be raised with both the mother and the father in order to have a normal growth. Having both parents in the family for leading children toward healthy lifestyle is an undeniable fact. To my perspective, each parent has some specific roles, so that his works can supplement the other' s accomplishment. In what follows, I delineate my justifications. First, the responsibilities of the parents are not alike in the family environment. To put it in another words, the mother can never play the role of the father and backwards. Less or more, the mothers care about the house management and in contrast, the fathers are obviously responsible for the outside issues. The veracity of the claim can objectively evaluated by the meticulous observations on the mass of examples; there are great numbers of successful persons who have had in a house with the couple of their parents. In consequence, with the help of each other, the parents can create the best space of peace and quiet for the offspring. Second, a child with one parent is suffering from mental problems and disorders. To some extent, infants, teenagers, or the adult raised with one parent have some psychological matters. As the relations between a child with the mother and the father is completely unique. Girls have great close relations with the mothers and the boys consider their father' s manner as the model of the life. All in all, even though there might be some sophisticated persons who have opposite viewpoints, I cite a clear bias in favor of the issue that a kid or a child growing should definitely be with both of the parents. By taking all above-mentioned argument in consideration, I ponder that each of parents has specific jobs in the families and children without one of them will find themselves mentally sick.
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the fact that there are numerous prosperous persons who have
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one
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parent
in the society, all children should
be raised
with both the
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mother
and the
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father
in order to have a normal growth. Having both
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parents
in the family for leading children toward healthy lifestyle is an undeniable fact. To my perspective, each
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parent
has
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some
specific roles,
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so
that his works can supplement the
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#039; s accomplishment. In what follows, I delineate my justifications.

First
, the responsibilities of the
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parents
are not alike in the family environment. To put it in
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another words
, the
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mother
can never play the role of the
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father
and backwards. Less or more, the mothers care about the
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house
management and
in contrast
, the
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fathers
are
obviously
responsible for the outside issues. The veracity of the claim can
objectively
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by the meticulous observations on the mass of examples; there are great numbers of successful persons who have had in a
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house
with the couple of their
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parents
. In consequence, with the
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help
of each other, the
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parents
can create the best space of peace and quiet for the offspring.

Second, a child with one
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parent
is suffering from mental problems and disorders. To
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some
extent, infants,
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teenagers
, or the adult raised with one
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parent
have
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some
psychological matters. As the relations between a child with the
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mother
and the
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father
is completely unique. Girls have great close relations with the mothers and the boys consider their
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father&
#039; s manner as the model of the life.

All in all,
even though
there might be
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some
sophisticated persons who have opposite viewpoints, I cite a
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clear
bias in favor of the issue that a kid or a child growing should definitely be with both of the
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parents
. By taking all above-mentioned argument in consideration, I ponder that each of
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parents
has specific jobs in the families and children without one of them will find themselves mentally sick.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Every child should be raised in a home with two parents. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 663

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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