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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All university students should be required to take basic science courses even if it is not the field of their study. v.664

All university students should be required to take basic science courses even if it is not the field of their study. v. 664
There is no doubt that the quality of provided courses in universities plays the prominent role in students’ successes. No one can blind eye to this factor' s influence on the students' future lives. A controversial question is raised related to the issue is that what type of courses they should take during their study in the university? Some people may hold this viewpoint that the students should be required to take basic science courses. However, others look this concept from the different lens and believe that this type of lessons may not be related to their fields of study and taking them is not necessary. From what follows, I will pinpoint some of outstanding reasons. One of the most predominant reason coming mind related to the statement is that the basic science course are often the difficult ones and taking this type of courses put additional pressure and stress on students. From psychological stand point, when one student take the fundamental science courses, he feel more pressure on his shoulders and finally he will be depressed. So, his efficiency in other courses will be declined. This means that taking this courses can devastate his self-confidence owing to this courses are so hard and getting high grade in them is so difficult. Furthermore, the other equally principal reason supported my idea is that taking these courses are waste of money and time and the students can perform more beneficial works which help them to reveal their lives' stress and thrive their talents instead of taking basic science courses. There are plenty number of activities which students can conduct to improve their creativities instead of waste their times during these courses such as taking part in some organization which helps them to boost their communication abilities, playing some sports which advocates their healthy lives and so on. Therefore, instead of taking this courses they can perform more other activities which have profound effect on their happiness and improvement. The last but not the least reason is that the basic science courses often are irrelevant to the students' fields of study and their future work. The goals of every person accepted in the university is preparing themselves for future career. So, they should utilize their studying time in the university and experience some courses which are related to their future works. An empirical test conducted in my country obviously demonstrates that above 80 percent of graduation students who find a prestigious job in their fields of study took the related courses when they were studying in the universities. This clarifies that students should not take this type of the course according to the fact that after graduation they will need the relevant course to be qualified for job opportunities. From what has been mention above, if one weighs the merits and demerits of taking basic science job through the study in the university, he can safely reach to this conclusion that taking these courses should not be obligatory in universities. It is hard to disguise that taking the basic course may have optimistic impact such as improving their foundation. Despite of this fact, taking these course is waste of time and money. All in all, it is anticipated that students will tend to not take these type of courses in the future.
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study
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lens and believe that this
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type
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related
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study
and taking them is not necessary. From what follows, I will pinpoint
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some
of outstanding reasons.

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related
to the statement is that the
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basic
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science
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course
are
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the difficult ones and taking this
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put additional pressure and
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stress
on
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students
. From psychological stand point, when one
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student
take the fundamental
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science
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, he
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feel
more pressure on his shoulders and
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he will
be depressed
.
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, his efficiency in
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other
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courses
will
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. This means that taking this
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courses
can devastate his self-confidence owing to
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this
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courses
are
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so
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and getting high grade in them is
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difficult.

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, the
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idea
is that taking these
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courses
are waste of money and
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time
and the
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students
can perform more beneficial works which
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help
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stress
and thrive their talents
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basic
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science
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courses
. There are
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number of activities which
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students
can conduct to
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improve
their
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creativities
instead
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times
during these
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courses
such as taking part in
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some
organization which
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helps
them to boost their communication abilities, playing
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sports which advocates their healthy
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lives
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,
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they can perform more
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other
activities which have profound effect on their happiness and improvement.

The last
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but
not the least reason is that the
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basic
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science
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courses
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future
work. The goals of every person
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accepted
in the
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university
is preparing themselves for
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future
career.
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, they should utilize their studying
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time
in the
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and experience
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some
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which are
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related
to their
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future
works. An empirical
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test
conducted in my country
obviously
demonstrates that above 80 percent of graduation
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students
who find a prestigious job in their fields of
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study
took the
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related
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courses
when they were studying in the
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universities
. This clarifies that
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students
should not take this
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type
of the
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course
according to the fact that after graduation they will need the relevant
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course
to
be qualified
for job opportunities.

From what has been mention above, if one weighs the merits and demerits of taking
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basic
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science
job through the
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study
in the
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university
, he can
safely
reach to this conclusion that taking these
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courses
should not be obligatory in
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universities
. It is
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hard
to disguise that taking the
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basic
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course
may have optimistic impact such as improving their foundation.
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this fact, taking these
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course
is waste of
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time
and money. All in all, it
is anticipated
that
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students
will tend to not take these
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of
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courses
in the
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future
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
79Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay All university students should be required to take basic science courses even if it is not the field of their study. v. 664

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
550 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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