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Do you agree or disagree? Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v.178

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 178
There is no doubt that work' s quality plays undeniable role in worker' s efficiency. No one can blind eye to this factor' s influence on our working times and performance. A controversial question is raised related to the issue is that how many works should workers perform in order to be satisfied. Some people may hold this viewpoint that they are more satisfied when they do some various tasks. However, others may look this concept from different lens and believe that they should work on just one work to improve their performance and be enjoyed. In my perspective, the first belief is true. From what follows, I will pinpoint some of most outstanding reasons. One of the most prominent reason coming mind related to the issue is that if the workers supposed to work on only one especial project or work, they will be overwhelmed and finally, they will be depressed. Nowadays, people in their hectic lives have ample amount of pressure on their shoulders. So, they should do some different things to eliminate this stagnation from their lives. One of this thing can be performing various type of task in their work places which in turn results to release their pressure and stress and make their lives more satisfied. Furthermore, the other equally principal reason advocated my idea is that they can thrive their talents by doing various tasks. If one person have problem with one project or cannot perform it beneficially, but he is efficient in other subject, he can spend more of his time and energy into that task and be prosper in it. An empirical test conducted in my country obviously demonstrates that above 80 percent of workers who can be successful in their works perform more than one task in their work times and chose the best project which they have interest and eager in it. Consequently, working on more than one task has a profound effect on flourishing the workers' talents. The last but not the least reason is that although by doing one project as a task in work time, the workers can concentrate on their work, it is not the good choose in all time owing to being unfortunate. From psychological stand point, when one person want to prosper in one work and his work has not any way to be success, he will be unfortunate. Therefore, by having different type of tasks to do, it can help them to broaden their chooses to reach their targets. Take Allame Amini, one of the most prestigious philosophers in my past time of my country, as an example. He experienced more than ten fields to be success and after being failed in all of them he found that he was able to be success in philosophy. This means that various task in work can be more proper for workers. From what has been mentioned above, if one weights the merits and demerits of performing many different types of task by workers, he can safely reach to this conclusion that this can be hospitable for them It is hard to disguise the fact that conducting only one task may has some optimistic effects such as good concentration on work. Despite of this fact, doing more than one task by workers is more satisfied. All in all, it is anticipated that people will tend to work on various types of task in their works more and more, if they inclined to be success and satisfied.
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and performance. A controversial question
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works should
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workers
perform in order to be
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satisfied
.
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people
may hold this viewpoint that they are more
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satisfied
when they do
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various
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tasks
.
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different
lens and believe that they should
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work
on
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work
to
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improve
their performance and
be enjoyed
. In my perspective, the
first
belief is true. From what follows, I will pinpoint
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some of most
outstanding reasons.

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workers
supposed to
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work
on
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only
one especial
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project
or
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work
, they will
be overwhelmed
and
finally
, they will
be depressed
. Nowadays,
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people
in their hectic
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lives
have ample amount of pressure on their shoulders.
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, they should do
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some
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different
things to eliminate this stagnation from their
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lives
. One of this thing can be performing
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various
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type
of
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task
in their
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work
places which in turn results to release their pressure and
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stress
and
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make
their
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lives
more satisfied.

Furthermore
, the other
equally
principal reason advocated my
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idea
is that they can thrive their talents by doing
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various
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tasks
. If one person have problem with one
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project
or cannot perform it
beneficially
,
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but
he is efficient in other subject, he can spend more of his
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time
and energy into that
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task
and be
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prosper
in it. An empirical
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test
conducted in my country
obviously
demonstrates that above 80 percent of
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workers
who can be successful in their works perform more than one
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task
in their
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work
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times
and chose the best
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project
which they have interest and eager in it.
Consequently
, working on more than one
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task
has a profound effect on flourishing the
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workers&
#039; talents.

The last
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but
not the least reason is that although by doing one
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project
as a
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task
in
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work
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time
, the
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workers
can concentrate on their
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work
, it is not the
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good
choose in all
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time
owing to being unfortunate. From psychological stand point, when one person want to prosper in one
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work
and his
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work
has not any way to be
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success
, he will be unfortunate.
Therefore
, by having
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different
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type
of
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tasks
to do, it can
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help
them to broaden their chooses to reach their targets. Take
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Allame
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Amini
, one of the most prestigious philosophers in my past
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time
of my country, as an example. He experienced more than ten fields to be
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success
and after
being failed
in all of them he found that he was able to be
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success
in philosophy. This means that
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various
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task
in
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work
can be more proper for workers.

From what has
been mentioned
above, if one weights the merits and demerits of performing
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many
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different
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types
of
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task
by
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workers
, he can
safely
reach to this conclusion that this can be hospitable for them It is
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hard
to disguise the fact that conducting
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only
one
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task
may has
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some
optimistic effects such as
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good
concentration on
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work
.
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this fact, doing more than one
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task
by
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workers
is more
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satisfied
. All in all, it
is anticipated
that
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people
will tend to
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work
on
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various
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types
of
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task
in their works more and more, if they inclined to be
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success
and
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satisfied
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 178

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
580 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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