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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks at the same time than doing the same task. v.603

Workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks at the same time than doing the same task. v. 603
Under the amelioration of people' s living standards, the flourishing industries have made workers' working tempo quicken. Considering such a situation, in order to improve working efficiency of workers, there is a statement be discussed that employers should do the different types of tasks at the same time. On the one hand, some people agree with this since they think it is helpful to to keep workers' minds refreshed. However, a considerate number of people on the opposite, which workers should do the same task. I totally agree this statement. I believe, comparing with the multitasking, doing the one task at sametime could be more positive to workers' efficiency. Firstly, the ability of concentrating oneself is the most vital quality to a worker. Without a focused attention, the task would be easily interupted by many distractions in the real working process, which may lead some serious mistakes. For example, Secondly, It' s self-evident that staying focused could help people improve there productivity a lot, which means the economic profits of employees could rise. The more efficient workers doing tasks, the more time was saved and more money was earned. As far as this point, the study from the Faculty of Management and Human Resources at University of Amsterdam showed that, for the workers at on industry, the level of their concentration is linearly related to the the its productivity. On the other hand, the multitasking will exert a negative effect on the work. In this way
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people&
#039; s living standards, the flourishing industries have made
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workers&
#039; working tempo quicken. Considering such a situation, in order to
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improve
working efficiency of
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workers
, there is a statement
be discussed
that employers should do the
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different
types of
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tasks
at the same time. On the one hand,
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some
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people
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agree
with this since they
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think
it is helpful
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to to
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keep
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workers&
#039; minds refreshed.
However
, a considerate number of
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people
on the opposite, which
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workers
should do the same
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task
. I
totally
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agree
this statement. I believe, comparing with the multitasking, doing the one
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task
at
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sametime
could be more
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positive
to
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workers&
#039; efficiency.

Firstly
, the ability of concentrating oneself is the most vital quality to a
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worker
. Without a focused attention, the
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task
would be
easily
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interupted
by
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many
distractions in the real working process, which may lead
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some
serious mistakes.
For example
,

Secondly
,
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It&
#039; s self-evident that staying focused could
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help
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people
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improve
there productivity a lot, which means the economic profits of employees could rise. The more efficient
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workers
doing
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tasks
, the more time
was saved
and more money
was earned
. As far as this point, the study from the Faculty of Management and Human Resources at University of Amsterdam
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showed
that, for the
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workers
at on industry, the level of their concentration is
linearly
related to the
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the its productivity
.
On the other hand
, the multitasking will exert a
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negative
effect on the work. In this
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way
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks at the same time than doing the same task. v. 603

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
245 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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