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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. v.581

Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. v. 581
University, as we all know, for the majority of people is the most important part of their life. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find debating about colleges sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. I believe that preparing by universities not only provides benefits for a future job but also provides remarkable advantages for students. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint. The first reason that makes me hold the belief that extra courses of universities are beneficial is the experience. Undoubtedly, nowadays, education that fundamentally is based on theories is out of date because it`s unfavorable effects become apparent. As long as a person doesn’t have enough experience in his field of study never can find a suitable job. What would have happened to a company if its employees had not had enough experience? Indeed, because of this adverse phenomenon, many companies provide pre-work courses for the student that come from universities, which means the knowledge students have achieved is not applicable. Based on an experiment that has been done recently, results showed that the time students should spend after their college in their career environment to learn their job in a student`s viewpoint as a new employee has been considered as a waste of time. Because they do not understand why they spent that much time on university courses while it is not useable in the job. Therefore, more courses that provide some kinds of job experiences for the student will be adorable. Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the extra knowledge provided by universities. Although critics may challenge this debate and suggest that this knowledge is not necessary, and universities should focus just on their careers, there is an increasing demand for such careers among students. If individuals do not have a place to teach them about the job and the application of science, they would not be a successful person in their future job. As we all know, human inborn with the natural instinct to seek superior positions, try to find a situation that shows their superiority. To illustrate, these days’, people do not look at university as an educational center; conversely, they seize this opportunity to enhance their ability in their future job. Take my personal experience as an example, a couple of years ago, one of the friends of mine did not believe in education in university and tried to find her job just based on experiences she achieved during previous years. When I registered for a supplementary career in college, she laughed at me and believed I am wasting my time. Fortunately, I found an excellent job that encourages her to register for an extra career that takes place in the university. To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that a career in colleges provides both experience and more knowledge for students.
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University
, as we all know, for the majority of
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people
is the most
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important
part of their life. Although it may seem exaggerated, at
first
sight, one may
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find
debating about colleges sensible. In this regard,
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many
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people
support this opinion that
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universities
should offer more
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courses
to prepare
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students
for the
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future
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before
they
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start
working. I believe that preparing by
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universities
not
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only
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provides
benefits for a
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future
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job
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but
also
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provides
remarkable advantages for
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students
. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.

The
first
reason that
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makes
me hold the belief that extra
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courses
of
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universities
are beneficial is the
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experience
.
Undoubtedly
, nowadays, education that
fundamentally
is based
on theories is out of date
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because
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it`s
unfavorable effects become apparent.
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As
long as a person doesn’t have
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enough
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experience
in his field of study never can
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find
a suitable
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job
. What would have happened to a
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company
if its employees had not had
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enough
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experience
?
Indeed
,
because of this
adverse phenomenon,
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many
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companies
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provide
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pre-work
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courses
for the
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student
that
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come
from
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universities
, which means the
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knowledge
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students
have achieved is not applicable. Based on an experiment that has
been done
recently, results
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showed
that the
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time
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students
should spend after their college in their
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career
environment to learn their
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job
in a
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student`s
viewpoint as a new employee has
been considered
as a waste of
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time
.
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Because
they do not understand why they spent that much
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time
on
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university
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courses
while it is not useable in the
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job
.
Therefore
, more
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courses
that
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provide
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some
kinds of
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job
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experiences
for the
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student
will be adorable.

Another
equally
noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the extra
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knowledge
provided by
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universities
. Although critics may challenge this debate and suggest that this
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knowledge
is not necessary, and
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universities
should focus
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just
on their
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careers
, there is an increasing demand for such
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careers
among
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students
. If individuals do not have a place to teach them about the
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job
and the application of science, they would not be a successful person in their
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future
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job
. As we all know, human inborn with the natural instinct to seek superior positions, try to
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find
a situation that
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shows
their superiority. To illustrate, these days’,
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people
do not look at
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university
as an educational center;
conversely
, they seize this opportunity to enhance their ability in their
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future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. Take my personal
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experience
as an example, a couple of years ago, one of the friends of mine did not believe in education in
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university
and tried to
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find
her
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job
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just
based on
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experiences
she achieved during previous years. When I registered for a supplementary
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career
in college, she laughed at me and believed I am wasting my
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time
.
Fortunately
, I found an excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
that encourages her to register for an extra
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career
that takes place in the university.

To summarize
, contemplating all remarks, we can
safely
conclude that a
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career
in colleges
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provides
both
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experience
and more
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knowledge
for
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students
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. v. 581

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
502 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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