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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v.559

Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 559
“After darkness, the brightness appears”; an Iranian proverb used to say that. This statement comes true when people encounter with difficult experiences in their lives. Although, for some, such hardships at the time become valuable lessons for the future, for others, such tortuous experiences should pass hoping for delightful time in future; the former consider hardships to be primary preparation for future, the latter makes them an intolerable gargantuan weight without any achievement; respectively. In this course, how can recognize the best perspective? For judging, in my opinion, the former group is superior to the latter due to this fact that abilities and human threshold increase as the result of difficult experiences on which the next paragraphs will elaborate. To begin with, flowering of abilities, talents, and skills is the first hardship’s result to be considered. From the beginning of vicissitudes, defense mechanism of human body has been applied to encounter with the problem. Under such circumstances, consciousness of human body increase leading to promotion of intelligence, physical ability, and mental preparation. “I had trouble remembering things; however, during tortuous times of exam, I could remember every word in my courses”; a forgetful student defined. As the result of such consciousness, skills also foster. An engineer explains: “When I took up my work, I was surprised to be effectual among my colleagues; thanks to my Prof’s severity during education years in the university” So, after hard times, success is waiting. Additionally, difficult times are the best opportunity for increasing human threshold. On the other words, after bearing hardships, human threshold gradually soars making possible other conditions much simpler to tolerate. A resident explains by narrating his experience in emergency room: “Every day was worse than the other day. Under such circumstances in emergency room (24 hours being on-call), working in other parts of hospital became much easier than once was thought, making doctors patient dealing with sick people” Hence, reaching high threshold under hard circumstances make human more patient than past. All in all, I contended that difficult experiences in people’s lives will be valuable experiences in their futures. So, people should take such experiences serious for building their future on the firm basis.
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comes
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people
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difficult
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experiences
in their
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lives
. Although, for
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some
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hardships
at the
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time
become valuable lessons for the
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future
, for others, such tortuous
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experiences
should pass hoping for delightful
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time
in
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future
; the former consider
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hardships
to be primary preparation for
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future
, the latter
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makes
them an intolerable gargantuan weight without any achievement;
respectively
. In this course, how can recognize the best perspective? For judging, in my opinion, the former group is superior to the latter due to this fact that abilities and
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human
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threshold
increase as the result of
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difficult
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experiences
on which the
next
paragraphs will elaborate.

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begin
with, flowering of abilities, talents, and
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skills
is the
first
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hardship’s
result to
be considered
. From the beginning of vicissitudes, defense mechanism of
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human
body has
been applied
to encounter with the problem. Under such circumstances, consciousness of
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human
body increase leading to promotion of intelligence, physical ability, and mental preparation. “I had trouble remembering things;
however
, during tortuous
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times
of exam, I could remember every word in my courses”; a forgetful student defined. As the result of such consciousness,
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skills
also
foster. An engineer
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explains
: “When I took up my work, I
was surprised
to be effectual among my colleagues; thanks to my Prof’s severity during education years in the university”
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, after
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hard
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times
, success is waiting.

Additionally
,
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difficult
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times
are the best opportunity for increasing
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human
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threshold
. On the
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other
words, after bearing
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hardships
,
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human
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threshold
gradually
soars making possible
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other
conditions much simpler to tolerate. A resident
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explains
by narrating his
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experience
in emergency room: “Every day was worse than the
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other
day. Under such circumstances in emergency room (24 hours being on-call), working in
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other
parts of hospital became much easier than once was
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thought
, making doctors patient dealing with sick
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people”
Hence
, reaching high
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threshold
under
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hard
circumstances
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make
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human
more patient than past.

All in all, I contended that
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difficult
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experiences
in
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people’s
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lives
will be valuable
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experiences
in their
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futures
.
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So
,
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people
should take such
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experiences
serious for building their
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future
on the firm basis.
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43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 559

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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