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63)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v.2

63) Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 2
Most people think that difficult experiences could impact them negatively. However, it is well known that difficult situations in our life help us to understand our environment as a society and as a result of this, keep us improving our knowledge in order to have more experience. In the next lines I will show you some reasons related to difficult experiences and how they become valuable lessons in our future life. Firstly, life based in difficult experiences could help you to understand the sense of your life. For example, if you have to study for an exam related to your career, you must to spend your time reading lessons and even making some exercises before the day to take your test. As an experience, when I was a teenager, I can remember that I had to take an admission test in order to apply to a public university. Eventhough, I prefer to spend my time in other activities instead of studying and practicing before the test, and as a result of that, when I finally went to take my test, I could not applied, because I needed to skim my notes and remember how to answer the question in a variety of topics. Therefore, when the test was over, I felt very stressed and frustrated because of my irresponsibility. Moreover, I had to wait at least one year to take the next opportunity, in order to apply to the university. Secondly, saving money for the future. This is another situation in which many people prefer to spend their money in things less important than improve their future. For example, when I was coursing my career, I had to work very hard in order to pay my studies and my appartment, it was very difficult because I could not save almost anything for my future. However, when I finally got a promotion, I could have extra money and I did prefer to use it in unimportant activities than in my future. As a result of that, I had to wait for at least ten years to buy a car and and almost 15 years to buy my house. Eventhough, I have to wait a lot of time to be aware of my situation and realize my projects. In conclusion, we can state that difficult experiences could improve our life and have a better vision to understand to reach our goals. In addition, we need to focus our thoughts in important things and express to others, mostly young people, all these experiences in order to help them to have good results.
Most
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that
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difficult
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experiences
could impact them
negatively
.
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, it is well known that
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difficult
situations in our
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life
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help
us to understand our environment as a society and as a
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result
of this,
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keep
us improving our knowledge in
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order
to have more
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experience
. In the
next
lines I will
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show
you
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some
reasons related to
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difficult
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experiences
and how they become valuable lessons in our
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future
life.

Firstly
,
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life
based in
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difficult
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experiences
could
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help
you to understand the sense of your
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life
.
For example
, if you
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have to
study for an exam related to your career, you
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must to
spend your time reading lessons and even making
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some
exercises
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before
the day to take your
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test
. As an
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experience
, when I was a
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teenager
, I can remember that I had to take an admission
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test
in
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order
to apply to a public university.
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Eventhough
, I prefer to spend my time in other activities
instead
of studying and practicing
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before
the
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test
, and as a
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result
of that, when I
finally
went to take my
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test
, I could not
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applied
,
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because
I needed to skim my notes and remember how to answer the question in a variety of topics.
Therefore
, when the
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test
was over, I felt
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very
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stressed
and frustrated
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because
of my irresponsibility.
Moreover
, I had to wait at least one year to take the
next
opportunity, in
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order
to apply to the university.

Secondly
, saving money for the
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future
. This is another situation in which
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many
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people
prefer to spend their money in things less
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important
than
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improve
their
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future
.
For example
, when I was coursing my career, I had to work
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very
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hard
in
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order
to pay my studies and my
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appartment
, it was
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very
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difficult
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because
I could not save almost anything for my
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future
.
However
, when I
finally
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got
a promotion, I could have extra money and I did prefer to
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use
it in unimportant activities than in my
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future
. As a
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result
of that, I had to wait for at least ten years to
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buy
a car
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and and
almost 15 years to
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buy
my
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house
.
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Eventhough
, I
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have to
wait
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a lot of
time to be aware of my situation and realize my projects.

In conclusion
, we can state that
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difficult
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experiences
could
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improve
our
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life
and have a better vision to
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understand to reach
our goals.
In addition
, we need to focus our thoughts in
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important
things and express to others,
mostly
young
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people
, all these
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experiences
in
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order
to
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help
them to have
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good
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results
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 63) Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
429 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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