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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The Internet causes people to interact with each other less than they did in the past. Use specific reasons to support your answers v.472

The Internet causes people to interact with each other less than they did in the past. Use specific reasons to support your answers v. 472
The internet is a technological innovation that added a new dimension to how we interact with each other. I do not believe that it causes people to interact with each other less than in the past. Today internet is dominated by social media websites like Facebook and Twitter. They provide us a platform to share our thoughts and feelings. We can upload pictures to express ourselves as well. Thus it has opened up a new channel of interaction. Lets take facebook, we can reach out to our school friends across the globe easily and get an update of their posts. We can comment or like on the posts to share our views. Thus it helps connect and discover people. Social media has increased our interaction through digital medium. People also write blogs. It gives the opportunity to a common person to reach out and interact with several people. Any one can read as per privacy policy and share comments. Thus we are not restricted but have a platform to reach out to a global audience. Hebbars kithen is a popular blog about cooking tasty vegetarian food. I had chanced upon it with simple search and my cooking abilities have improved greatly since. I had given my feedback and asked to include some more potato recipes. It was fun to interact with that lady. We can also find online dating services. Internet as a medium can thus be also used to connect with like minded individuals. There are several Facebook groups for going to an event. I have recently joined the trekking group called Adventurephiles. Through this I have met several hiking enthusiasts in my city and we planned trips together. Through video calling and VOIP, it has become easier to communicate with friends and family easily and at a cheaper cost. Once upon a time, phone call was a luxury and we spoke hardly for a minute. Today we can talk for hours given the technology. Instant messaging and other apps have also made interaction easier. Face to face interaction has reduced since the advent of internet. This can primarily be attributed to the fact that we can easily gain information online now, for which we once needed to depend on others. Nevertheless interaction as a whole has increased and new ways of communication and interaction have developed. Internet allows us to reach out to people in different corners of the world easily. We can meet new people of shared interests and explore interests in different fields like never before. Thus internet causes people to interact more than in the past.
The internet is a technological innovation that
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added
a
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new
dimension to how we
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interact
with each
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other
. I do not believe that it causes
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people
to
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interact
with each
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other
less than in the past.

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Today
internet
is dominated
by social media websites like Facebook and Twitter. They provide us a platform to share our thoughts and feelings. We can upload pictures to express ourselves
as well
.
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Thus
it has opened up a
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new
channel of
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interaction
.
Did you mean "Let's" (let's = let us; lets = 3rd person singular of 'let')?
Lets
take
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facebook
, we can
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reach
out to our school friends across the globe
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easily
and
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get
an update of their posts. We can comment or like on the posts to share our views.
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Thus
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
connect and discover
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people
. Social media has increased our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interaction
through digital medium.

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People
also
write blogs. It gives the opportunity to a common person to
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reach
out and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interact
with several
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people
.
Did you mean "Anyone"?
Any one
can read as per privacy policy and share comments.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Thus
we are not restricted
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but
have a platform to
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reach
out to a global audience.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Hebbars
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kithen
is a popular blog about cooking tasty vegetarian food. I had chanced upon it with simple search and my cooking abilities have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
greatly
since. I had
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given
my feedback and asked to include
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some
more potato recipes. It was fun to
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interact
with that lady.

We can
also
find online dating services. Internet as a medium can
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thus
be
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to connect with
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like minded
individuals. There are several Facebook groups for going to an
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event
. I have recently
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joined
the trekking group called
Possible spelling mistake found.
Adventurephiles
. Through this I have met several hiking enthusiasts in my
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city and
we planned trips together.

Through video calling and
Possible spelling mistake found.
VOIP
, it has become easier to communicate with friends and family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
easily
and at a cheaper cost. Once upon a time, phone call was a
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luxury and
we spoke hardly for a minute.
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Today
we can talk for hours
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given
the technology. Instant messaging and
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other
apps have
also
made
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interaction
easier.

Face to face
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interaction
has
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reduced
since the advent of internet. This can
primarily
be attributed
to the fact that we can
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easily
gain information online
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now
, for which we once needed to depend on others.
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Nevertheless
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interaction
as a whole has increased and
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new
ways of communication and
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interaction
have developed.

Internet
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allows
us to
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reach
out to
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people
in
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different
corners of the world
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easily
. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
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new
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people
of shared interests and explore interests in
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different
fields like never
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Thus
internet causes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interact
more than in the past.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay The Internet causes people to interact with each other less than they did in the past. Use specific reasons to support your answers v. 472

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
431 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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