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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.364

It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 364
Young people have some limitation in some districts in cities of America, where they cannot attend unless they have an adult companion. I strongly agree that some areas can be dangerous for the youth and they should not be allowed to expose themselves to danger at any point. In recent years, the crime rate has been increased significantly which has made the streets unsafe at certain hours of the night. To illustrate an example, burglars usually commit the crime at night in order to stay unknown and it cannot be denied that they can be a threat to young ones lives. Thus, some actions must be taken in order to provide children with their safety, one of which is a curfew. While this law would make them limited and would cause inconvenience, I think it works for their own safety and will have more positive effects. In addition to this, adults are more responsible and mature enough to prevent teenagers from taking any careless decisions. Furthermore, if a youth is accompanied by a mature one, the risk of being in danger would be reduced due to the experience that he/she has. Besides, criminals would not take the risk of being caught by a more powerful one, and will avoid any violation. Therefore, adults can help teenagers to have a safer life. To conclude, a curfew has been implemented by legislators in order to ban teenagers from some areas of the US at specific times of the night unless they are accompanied by a mature person. I believe this would provide the youth with safety and reduces the crime rate.
Young
people
have
some
limitation in
some
districts in cities of America, where they cannot attend unless they have an adult companion. I
strongly
agree
that
some
areas can be
dangerous
for the
youth and
they should not be
allowed
to expose themselves to
danger
at any point.

In recent years, the crime rate has
been increased
significantly
which has made the streets unsafe at certain hours of the night. To illustrate an example, burglars
usually
commit the crime at night in order to stay unknown and it cannot
be denied
that they can be a threat to young ones
lives
.
Thus
,
some
actions
must
be taken
in order to provide children with their safety, one of which is a curfew. While this law would
make
them limited and would cause inconvenience, I
think
it works for their
own
safety and will have more
positive
effects.

In addition
to this, adults are more responsible and mature
enough
to
prevent
teenagers
from taking any careless decisions.
Furthermore
, if a youth
is accompanied
by a mature one, the
risk
of being in
danger
would be
reduced
due to the experience that he/she has.
Besides
, criminals would not take the
risk
of
being caught
by a more powerful one, and will avoid any violation.
Therefore
, adults can
help
teenagers
to have a safer life.

To conclude
, a curfew has
been implemented
by legislators in order to ban
teenagers
from
some
areas of the US at specific times of the night unless they
are accompanied
by a mature person. I believe this would provide the youth with safety and
reduces
the crime rate.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 364

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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