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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.304

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 304
Today, people in various countries are well aware of the problems caused by the overweight and taking care by following diet to be in shape. But in few nations it's going in an opposite way, people are suffering with over weight issues due to lack of maintaining their fitness and neglecting their health. One country I would probably mention when comes to the overweight issues is America. The majority of people in the states are suffering from obesity. A survey conducted by New York Times in the year 2018 stated, the average weight of an American is around 75 kilograms and it increases about 0. 5 percent every five year term. For example, my friend from USA use to be around 55 kilograms in the 2011 and now in 2019 he weighs around 75. I always suggest him some tips to follow which helps him to stay fit all the time. The main reason for being overweight is their diet. Many of these countries regularly have junk food which is oil rich and contains high amount of cholesterol leads to the cardiac arrest and various types of cancers. For example, my relative who was born in Saudi often eats fast proceed food and last year he got a sudden stroke and expired. Doctor's given the explanation of his death is due to his overweight. The government of such countries shouldn't encourage the companies which offer junk. Along with that, they strictly need to implement the laws on the existing brand's. They should create fitness related ad-campaigns, marathons and include all the necessary exercises for the students in their school and college curriculum. Conducting fitness related competition's among them may also bring changes in the people's mindset towards health. To conclude, the people in the countries whose average weight of a person increases has to strictly follow the diet rules and should exercise regularly. Respective country heads should seriously think about the overweight issues and should resolve from its root level.
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Today
,
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people
in various
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countries
are well aware of the problems caused by the
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overweight
and taking care by following diet to be in shape.
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But
in few nations it's going
Consider replacing "in an opposite way" with the adverb for "opposite"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an opposite way
,
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people
are suffering with over weight issues due to lack of maintaining their fitness and neglecting their health.

One
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country
I would
probably
mention when
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comes
to the
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overweight
issues is America. The majority of
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people
in the states are suffering from obesity. A survey conducted by New York Times in the year 2018 stated, the average weight of an American is around 75 kilograms and it increases about 0. 5 percent every five year term.
For example
, my friend from USA
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use to
be around 55 kilograms in the 2011 and
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now
in 2019 he weighs around 75. I always suggest him
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some
tips to follow which
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helps
him to stay fit all the time.

The main reason for being
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overweight
is their diet.
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Many
of these
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countries
regularly
have junk food which is oil rich and contains high amount of cholesterol leads to the cardiac arrest and various types of cancers.
For example
, my relative who
was born
in Saudi
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often
eats
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fast
proceed food and last year he
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got
a sudden stroke and expired. Doctor's
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given
the explanation of his death is due to his
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overweight
. The
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government
of such
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countries
shouldn't encourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
which offer junk. Along with that, they
strictly
need to implement the laws on the existing brand's. They should create fitness related ad-campaigns, marathons and include all the necessary exercises for the students in their school and college curriculum. Conducting fitness related competition's among them may
also
bring
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the
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people
's mindset towards health.

To conclude
, the
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people
in the
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countries
whose average weight of a person increases
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has to
strictly
follow the diet
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rules
and should exercise
regularly
. Respective
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country
heads should
seriously
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think
about the
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overweight
issues and should resolve from its root level.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 304

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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