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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.290

Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 290
Consumers of technology enabled devices say that since they can now watch movies on their tablets or phones, there is little reason left to go to a cinema. Other people argue that films should be seen on the big screen to be completely enjoyed. In my opinion, movie goers' personal preference dictates whether to watch movies in a theatre or not. Watching a film on a technology enabled device provides the flexibility which a theatre does not provide. Users can play, pause or altogether watch the film again on their devices. In addition, users have the flexibility of watching movies on their beds in a relaxed environment without worrying about dressing up or showing up on time. This has led to widespread usage of mobile devices for consumption of films and entertainment. The recent announcement of reaching one million subscribers, in a small span of 3 years, by the entertainment streaming service Netflix is an example of mobile devices gaining preference in comparison to cinemas. Going to the cinema is often enjoyed as it provides a fulfilling experience to most individuals. In many cases, they go out with their families, friends or dates and buy various eatables, available near the theatres, to enjoy the day. This experience is unique to movie theatres and cannot be found in homes, where most of the mobile device users see movies. For example, a respondent in a recent survey of cinemas was quoted as saying 'the smell of fresh popcorn and perfume can never be replaced by lazy film watching at home'. Therefore, cinemas offer a wholesome experience which cannot be found while watching movies on devices. In conclusion, both the views have their own merits and demerits. Hence, in my opinion, it is a matter of personal preference and mood if someone wants to watch a movie at home on a screen, or by going out to a cinema.
Consumers of technology enabled
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devices
say that since they can
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now
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watch
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movies
on their tablets or phones, there is
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little
reason
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left
to go to a
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cinema
. Other
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people
argue that films should be
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seen
on the
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big
screen to be completely enjoyed. In my opinion,
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movie
goers' personal preference dictates whether to
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watch
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movies
in a
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theatre
or not.

Watching a film on a technology enabled
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device
provides the flexibility which a
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theatre
does not provide. Users can play, pause or altogether
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watch
the film again on their
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devices
.
In addition
, users have the flexibility of watching
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movies
on their beds in a relaxed environment without worrying about dressing up or showing up on time. This has led to widespread usage of mobile
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devices
for consumption of films and entertainment. The recent announcement of reaching one million subscribers, in a
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small
span of 3 years, by the entertainment streaming service Netflix is an example of mobile
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devices
gaining preference
in comparison
to cinemas.

Going to the
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cinema
is
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often
enjoyed as it provides a fulfilling experience to most individuals. In
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many
cases, they go out with their families, friends or dates and
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buy
various eatables, available near the
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theatres
, to enjoy the day. This experience is unique to
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movie
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theatres
and cannot
be found
in homes, where most of the mobile
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device
users
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see
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movies
.
For example
, a respondent in a recent survey of
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cinemas
was quoted
as saying 'the smell of fresh popcorn and perfume can never
be replaced
by lazy film watching at home'.
Therefore
,
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cinemas
offer a wholesome experience which cannot
be found
while watching
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movies
on devices.

In conclusion
, both the views have their
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own
merits and demerits.
Hence
, in my opinion, it is a matter of personal preference and mood if someone wants to
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watch
a
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movie
at home on a screen, or by going out to a
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cinema
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 290

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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