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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be successful, a school should have many good textbooks. Use reasons and examples to support your response. v.277

To be successful, a school should have many good textbooks. Use reasons and examples to support your response. v. 277
What age humans should learn to keep track of their finances is a very clever question. Everyone needs to learn it at some point. I totally agree that it should be taught in a school. According to me, people should educate themselves about such matters sooner than later. Firstly, You can hire help to do almost any household tasks today, provided you are super rich. Still, You need to have complete control of your wealth. When you check life of any financially successful celebrity, you will realize that they all have one skill in common and that is financial awareness. Asset management is necessary for a common man who wants to live financially stable life. For example, doctors, lawyers, small shop owners or even housewife need to monitor their spending and earning habits. Secondly, Secondary school is a perfect time from age perspective to learn it. Everyone needs to manage their expenditures once they are in a college or starts working. You are less likely to make big mistakes, if you were given proper education. Teenagers have a lot less to lose financially, Hence you can learn and make mistakes along the way. For example, parents can give pocket money to their kids and they should try to keep track of all the transactions. Even if they fail in doing so, there is nothing bigger at stake. On the other hand, some people argue that some skill can't be taught in an institute and can be learned only by experience. However, I feel that most students if not all can learn at least basics in this way, which can reduce their probability of making horrible mistakes. In conclusion, Important lessons such as money management should be taught at a school level. It helps students and prepares them for the future.
What age humans should
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keep
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of their finances is a
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very
clever question. Everyone
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needs
to
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learn
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some
point. I
totally
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agree
that it should
be taught
in a school.
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According to me
,
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people
should educate themselves about such matters sooner than later.

Firstly
, You can hire
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help
to do almost any household tasks
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today
, provided you are super rich.
Still
, You
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need
to have complete control of your wealth. When you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
life of any
financially
successful celebrity, you will realize that they all have one
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skill
in common and
that is
financial awareness. Asset management is necessary for a common
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man
who wants to
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live
financially
stable life.
For example
, doctors, lawyers,
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small
shop owners or even housewife
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need
to monitor their spending and earning habits.

Secondly
, Secondary school is a perfect time from age perspective to
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learn
it. Everyone
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needs
to manage their expenditures once they are in a college or
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starts
working. You are less likely to
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make
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big
mistakes, if you were
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given
proper education.
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Teenagers
have a lot less to lose
financially
,
Hence
you can
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learn
and
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make
mistakes along the way.
For example
, parents can give pocket money to their
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kids and
they should try to
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keep
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track
of all the transactions. Even if they fail in doing
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so
, there is nothing bigger at stake.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
argue that
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some
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skill
can't
be taught
in an institute and can
be learned
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only
by experience.
However
, I feel that most students if not all can
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learn
at least basics in this way, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their probability of making horrible mistakes.

In conclusion
,
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Important
lessons such as money management should
be taught
at a school level. It
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helps
students and prepares them for the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay To be successful, a school should have many good textbooks. Use reasons and examples to support your response. v. 277

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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