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Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Newspaper and magazines are the best way of to learn about the foreign country. v.6

Newspaper and magazines are the best way of to learn about the foreign country. v. 6
It is often argued that a high paid job is vital than a satisfying work with less wage. I strongly agree with this opinion and I believe salary is the key, not job satisfaction. First of all, I like to be paid well because it will fulfil all my dreams of buying valuable things. Even though, If one’s job is satisfactory, but, the pay Is insufficient, they have to compromise for all their needs. For example, one of my friends is interested to visit Belgium. He is striving hard to save the money for the last 2 years, but, as his pay is so less he is not able to show a sufficient amount to the government which is required for getting a touring visa. So, I always believe to work with an organization that pays me more. The other reason one has to choose a bigger salary than job satisfaction is for keeping their family happier. A person with good pay will have an opportunity to take care of the family's needs as per the expectations and requirements. For example, One of my friend's father was suffering from rare skin cancer and they were able to identify it in advance stages. It’s very expensive to be treated in such stages, local doctors suggested him a hospital in London. He was able to afford because he’s paid well. It’s not possible to manage such situations which are often linked with money even if he is happy with his job. To conclude, Even though many tend to work for satisfaction irrespective of salaries, it’s very difficult them to manage all their responsibilities and requirements. So in my opinion preferably a big pay is better and I have no regrets for compromising in terms of job satisfaction.
It is
often
argued that a high paid
job
is
vital
than a satisfying work with less wage. I
strongly
agree
with this opinion and I believe salary is the key, not
job
satisfaction.

First of all
, I like to
be paid
well
because
it will fulfil all my dreams of buying valuable things.
Even though
, If one’s
job
is satisfactory,
but
, the
pay
Is insufficient, they
have to
compromise for all their needs.
For example
, one of my friends
is interested
to visit Belgium. He is striving
hard
to save the money for the last 2 years,
but
, as his
pay
is
so
less he is not able to
show
a sufficient amount to the
government
which
is required
for getting a touring visa.
So
, I always believe to work with an organization that
pays
me more.

The other reason one
has to
choose a bigger salary than
job
satisfaction is for keeping their family happier. A person with
good
pay
will have an opportunity to take care of the family's needs as per the expectations and requirements.
For example
, One of my friend's father was suffering from rare skin
cancer and
they were able to identify it in advance stages. It’s
very
expensive to
be treated
in such stages, local doctors suggested him a hospital in London. He was able to afford
because
he’s paid well. It’s not possible to manage such situations which are
often
linked with money even if he is happy with his job.

To conclude
,
Even though
many
tend to work for satisfaction irrespective of salaries, it’s
very
difficult them to manage all their responsibilities and requirements.
So
in my opinion
preferably
a
big
pay
is better and I have no regrets for compromising in terms of
job
satisfaction.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Newspaper and magazines are the best way of to learn about the foreign country. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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