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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v.650

Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v. 650
There are many different aspects of human behavior that defines our culture and our species as a whole, there are of course positive ones and some of them are negative. Problems in our life are specified from different points of view some people fail because of their behavioral problems, some tend to ignore them and of course there are people who try to change the way they are. Moreover, i agree with this statement because of 2 main reasons which i will explore in the following essay. Firstly, humans are the only known species that can choose the way it behaves, we can think, we can explore and analyze different aspects of our life. This is a distinct trait only displayed by us. This is why im implementing the idea that our future will be less comfortable if we dont analyze it right and don' t change something in our lives. For example, if we look in our history, we can see that human' s aggressive behavior was the case of many wars, including the most tragic ones, even thought our life today is indeed better, we need to eradicate our desire for conflicts, especially for wars, or as a consequence we could lose everything we achieved to this point, this is why our behaviour should be more based on our society prosperity not on useless conflicts over borders. Secondly, we could take this topic on a more close level, for example, i had a bad behavior in middle school and most of my colleagues were ignoring me, that had a serious effect on me, that i can observe right now, that little boy didn' t think that in future he would become more anti-social because of his behavioral problems so learn from other people mistakes and most important learn from your own mistakes because it is important to emphasize that everything that looks minor now, will eventually cause major problems in our future and will make our future less comfortable. In conclusion i can say that i agree that although life today is way better than it used to be, humanity and you as a your self should always look for ways to perfect behaviors and the way we treat ourselves and other people, because all those things are tied to our future in my opinion, and we should now ignore the fact that everything done has a effect even if you dont know it or notice it, this is why we should try to perfect ourselves at a maximum level possible.
There are
many
different
aspects of human
behavior
that defines our culture and our species as a whole, there are

of
course
positive
ones
and
some
of them are
negative
.
Problems
in our
life
are specified
from
different
points of
view


some
people
fail
because
of their behavioral
problems
,
some
tend to
ignore
them and
of course
there are
people
who try to
change
the way they are.
Moreover
,
i
agree
with this statement
because
of 2 main reasons which
i
will explore in the following essay.

Firstly
, humans are the
only
known species that can choose the way it behaves, we can
think
, we can explore and analyze
different
aspects of our
life
. This is a distinct trait
only
displayed by us. This is why
im
implementing the
idea
that our
future
will be less comfortable if we
dont
analyze it right and
don&
#039; t
change
something in our
lives
.
For example
, if we look in our history, we can
see
that
human&
#039; s aggressive
behavior
was the case of
many
wars, including the
most


tragic
ones
, even
thought
our
life
today
is
indeed
better, we need to eradicate our desire for conflicts,
especially
for wars, or as a consequence we could lose everything we achieved to this point, this is why our
behaviour
should be more based on our society prosperity not on useless conflicts over borders.

Secondly
, we could take this topic on a more close level,
for example
,
i
had a
bad
behavior
in middle school and most of my colleagues were ignoring me, that had a serious effect on me, that
i
can observe right
now
, that
little
boy
didn&
#039; t
think
that in
future
he would become more anti-social
because
of his behavioral
problems
so
learn from other
people
mistakes
and most
important
learn from your
own
mistakes
because
it is
important
to emphasize that everything that looks minor
now
, will
eventually
cause major
problems
in our
future
and will
make
our
future
less comfortable.

In conclusion
i
can say that
i
agree
that although
life
today
is way better than it
used
to be, humanity and you as
a your self
should always look for ways to perfect
behaviors
and the way we treat ourselves and other
people
,
because
all those things
are tied
to our
future
in my opinion, and we should
now
ignore
the fact that everything done has
a
effect even if you
dont
know it or notice it, this is why we should try to perfect ourselves at a maximum level possible.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay Although life today is better than it used to be, human behavior is causing problems that will mean life in thefuture is less comfortable. v. 650

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
423 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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