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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Public speaking should be a required course for all students in a university. v.197

Public speaking should be a required course for all students in a university. v. 197
It is often said by some group of people that the way of living is going to vanish due to some technical changes. These both have many advantages and disadvantages. I agree that tradition and new inventions cannot be mixed together, they both have their own characteristics. On the one hand, in olden days people followed some or the other traditional things to have a healthy life and to differ from other countries. The culture shows the history and ways of living with family members and in societies. However, some people won’t follow tradition, but most of them love to acquire knowledge from the ancestors. For example, these traditions are still alive because of our parents and grandparents. If this was not done, then everyone would become an atheist. Finally, this won’t be lost as all the people are interested to be with the tradition. There are so many advantages like learning to live and gaining knowledge etc. , On the other hand, technology is rapidly changing the world of new inventions. Furthermore, all the individuals are keen to use that in their sail activities. So, as far as global competition concerned the new inventions should be appreciated and need to encourage more and more newcomers into the society. Moreover, people are very talented that they follow the old tradition as well as the new inventions in the technical field like computers and other gadgets. What is more, important is that these two areas have their own strategies and cannot be brought together in any manner. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and moreover, these two have huge benefits by practising in our daily life. There is no need to mix both.
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advantages and disadvantages. I
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own
characteristics.

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traditional things to have a healthy life and to differ from
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countries. The culture
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shows
the history and ways of living with family members and in societies.
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,
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,
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most of them
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love
to acquire knowledge from the ancestors.
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of our parents and grandparents. If this was not done, then everyone would become an atheist.
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. There are
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advantages like learning to
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hand, technology is
rapidly
changing the world of
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new
inventions.
Furthermore
, all the individuals are keen to
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use
that in their sail activities.
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So
, as far as global competition concerned the
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new
inventions should
be appreciated
and need to encourage more and more newcomers into the society.
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,
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people
are
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very
talented that they follow the
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old
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tradition
as well
as the
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new
inventions in the technical field like computers and
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other
gadgets.
What is more
,
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important
is that these two areas have their
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own
strategies and cannot
be brought
together in any manner.

In conclusion
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and
moreover
, these two have huge benefits by
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practising
in our daily life.

There is no need to mix both.
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IELTS essay Public speaking should be a required course for all students in a university. v. 197

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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