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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v.198

Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v. 198
It has been observed that the crime rate is increasing rapidly in many countries and criminals are adapting more violent actions to commit the crime. Governments are trying their hard to control the crime rate and bring it to the sustainable limit, but it seems that are unable to achieve this target as we are coming across more and more criminal activities on a daily basis. I can think of several reasons behind the sudden increase in criminal acts. One of the reasons is that our laws are not strong enough to punish the offenders for their deeds. For example, In India, the mother of a rape victim is fighting against rapists since last 4-5 years, but this case is not coming to conclusion despite rapists being already punished to be executed. Each time when the government decides a day to execute them, their lawyer comes up with arguments that save them from being executed. Another reason behind the increasing rate of crime is the gap between rich and poor people in our society and lack of job opportunities. The desire to live the luxurious life and unemployment make people stealing things that do not have and they cannot afford to buy. There are several groups in some countries that are in oppose of particular religions and support violent activities to harm people of those religions. It is very difficult to control the crime rate, but I can think of several ways that can help to reduce it some extent. Governments should take strict legal actions against criminals who have committed serious crimes such as rape, murder etc. This can reduce encouragement that they are getting to perform more violent actions in future. Increasing cost of items that are needed in daily routine such as fruits, vegetables, grains should be controlled so that people can buy it instead of stealing it. Government should focus on creating job opportunities sufficient enough to feed the population of the country so that people can have regular income. There are some crimes which are extremely difficult to control as they have religious belief tide for them unless we can find an effective way to stop them. Perhaps we can try to make sure that fewer young people enter the cycle of crime. We could do this through education and imparting moral values and the importance of equality.
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is increasing
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in
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many
countries and
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criminals
are adapting more violent actions to commit the
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crime
.
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Governments
are trying their
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hard
to control the
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crime
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rate
and bring it to the sustainable limit,
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but
it seems that are unable to achieve this target as we are coming across more and more
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criminal
activities on a daily basis.

I can
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think
of several reasons behind the sudden increase in
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criminal
acts. One of the reasons is that our laws are not strong
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enough
to punish the offenders for their deeds.
For example
, In India, the mother of a rape victim is fighting against rapists since last 4-5 years,
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but
this case is not coming to conclusion despite rapists being already punished to
be executed
. Each time when the
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government
decides a day to execute them, their lawyer
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comes
up with arguments that save them from
being executed
. Another reason behind the increasing
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rate
of
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crime
is the gap between rich and poor
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people
in our society and lack of job opportunities. The desire to
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live
the luxurious life and unemployment
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make
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people
stealing things that do not
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have and
they cannot afford to
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buy
. There are several groups in
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some
countries that are in oppose of particular religions and support violent activities to harm
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people
of those religions.

It is
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very
difficult to control the
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crime
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rate
,
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think
of several ways that can
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help
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reduce
it
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extent.
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Governments
should take strict legal actions against
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criminals
who have committed serious
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crimes
such as rape, murder etc. This can
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reduce
encouragement that they are getting to perform more violent actions
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in future
. Increasing cost of items that
are needed
in daily routine such as fruits, vegetables, grains should
be controlled
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so
that
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people
can
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buy
it
instead
of stealing it.
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Government
should focus on creating job opportunities sufficient
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enough
to feed the population of the country
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so
that
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people
can have regular income.

There are
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some
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crimes
which are
extremely
difficult to control as they have religious belief tide for them unless we can find an effective way to
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stop
them. Perhaps we can try to
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make
sure that fewer young
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people
enter the cycle of
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crime
. We could do this through education and imparting moral values and the importance of equality.
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Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v. 198

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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