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there is a increase of noise in our daily life now a days. why is this a problem? what can be done to reduce it v.1

there is a increase of noise in our daily life now a days. why is this a problem? what can be done to reduce it v. 1
It is everyone’s wish to lead a happy life in today’s stressful world. It is difficult to have a universal definition of happiness because everyone has different set criteria for its describe it. This essay will be discussing that a single parameter can't be set to define happiness, and how good health coupled with pleasant family life are the most crucial factors to achieve cheerfulness in life. To begin with, it is difficult to define happiness because of the various parameters involved. One important factor is the wealth, which is considered to be a marker of a happy life as it enables us to meet our requirements, however, it brings extra stress with it as every rich man can't be considered a happy person on this planet. For instance, a recent article published in the Pakistan Medical Journal revealed that sixty per cent of the elite rich businessmen in Karachi were depressed with their lives, despite having enough finances to lead a luxurious life. Contrary to this, someone achieving professional excellence alone, without enough financial resources, may not be happy as the lack of money will make him feel deprived rather than being happy. It thus clarifies the difficulty to devise a unified definition of happiness based on a single parameter. However, there are some crucial factors which can play an important role to get the true spirit of happiness. Firstly, happiness will be meaningless without the physical health and well being. A person suffering from blood cancer is likely to remain unhappy, even if provided with any other ingredient of happiness like money. Adding further, harmonious family relations are an integral part of happiness. As per a recent survey report, published in The Times magazine, people having good family relations were found to be the most contented with their lives in the New York City as compared to the ones having more money, but disturbed family life. Thus, there are other crucial factors beyond wealth and professional achievements, which are integral to a happy life. To summarise, it is difficult to define happiness based on a single parameter, rather linking of the various criteria of happiness will be helpful in achieving happiness. I hope that society will have a deep insight into happiness to ensure a balanced approach, rather than running after a single factor to achieve it.
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describe
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single
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to define
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happiness
, and how
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good
health coupled with pleasant
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family
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life
are the most crucial
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factors
to achieve cheerfulness in life.

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begin
with, it is difficult to define
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happiness
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because
of the various parameters involved. One
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important
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factor
is the wealth, which
is considered
to be a marker of a
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happy
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life
as it enables us to
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meet
our requirements,
however
, it brings extra
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stress
with it as every rich
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man
can't
be considered
a
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happy
person on this planet.
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, a recent article published in the Pakistan Medical Journal revealed that sixty per cent of the elite rich businessmen in Karachi
were depressed
with their
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lives
, despite having
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enough
finances to lead a luxurious
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life
. Contrary to this, someone achieving professional excellence alone, without
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enough
financial resources, may not be
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happy
as the lack of money will
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make
him feel deprived
rather
than being
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happy
. It
thus
clarifies the difficulty to devise a unified definition of
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happiness
based on a
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single
parameter.

However
, there are
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some
crucial
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factors
which can play an
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important
role to
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get
the true spirit of
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.
Firstly
,
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will be meaningless without the physical health and
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well being
. A person suffering from blood cancer is likely to remain unhappy, even if provided with any other ingredient of
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happiness
like money. Adding
further
, harmonious
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family
relations are an integral part of
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happiness
. As per a recent survey report, published in The Times magazine,
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people
having
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good
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family
relations
were found
to be the most contented with their
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lives
in the New York City as compared to the ones having more money,
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but
disturbed
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family
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life
.
Thus
, there are other crucial
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factors
beyond wealth and professional achievements, which are integral to a
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happy
life.

To
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, it is difficult to define
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happiness
based on a
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single
parameter,
rather
linking of the various criteria of
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happiness
will be helpful in achieving
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happiness
. I hope that society will have a deep insight into
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happiness
to ensure a balanced approach,
rather
than running after a
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single
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factor
to achieve it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay there is a increase of noise in our daily life now a days. why is this a problem? what can be done to reduce it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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