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Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v.3

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 3
Learning and education is an important part of a child’s life. Children learn a lot from their surroundings. The parents are the first guides and mentors of their children. Involving the children in household tasks is a vital part of their learning. When the kids are old enough to be able to help in such tasks, they should be made to do so. Children can be asked to help their mother in cooking, cleaning the house, organising their wardrobes, setting the dining table for lunch and dinner, putting the things in order at home. These are small tasks, but in doing so, the children learn a lot. These small chores inculcate a feeling of responsibility in children. For example, my two-year-old is always instructed to put her toys back in the bucket whenever she is done playing. Now, she does not need to be told that either, because she knows that it’s her responsibility to put her things back in order when she is done with them. This sense of responsibility also makes a child more confident. The child also learns to help people around. It develops a caring attitude towards other people. It also helps children to develop a habit of doing things together with their peers. The child gets disciplined when he is used to organising his room and wardrobe. In short, in order to make the children a useful part of a community, we should involve them in such activities. This will not only groom their personalities but also set an example for others to follow.
Learning and education is an
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important
part of a
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child’s
life.
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Children
learn a lot from their surroundings. The parents are the
first
guides and mentors of their children.

Involving the
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children
in household tasks is a vital part of their learning. When the kids are
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old
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enough
to be able to
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help
in such tasks, they should
be made
to do
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so
.
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Children
can
be asked
to
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help
their mother in cooking, cleaning the
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house
,
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organising
their wardrobes, setting the dining table for lunch and dinner, putting the things in order at home. These are
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small
tasks,
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but
in doing
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so
, the
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children
learn a lot.

These
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small
chores inculcate a feeling of responsibility in
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children
.
For example
, my two-year-
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old
is always instructed to put her toys back in the bucket whenever she
is done
playing.
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Now
, she does not need to be
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told
that either,
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because
she knows that it’s her responsibility to put her things back in order when she
is done
with them. This sense of responsibility
also
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makes
a
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child
more confident. The
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child
also
learns to
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help
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people
around. It develops a caring attitude towards other
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people
. It
also
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helps
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children
to develop a habit of doing things together with their peers. The
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child
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gets
disciplined when he is
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used
to
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organising
his room and wardrobe.

In short, in order to
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make
the
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children
a useful part of a community, we should involve them in such activities. This will not
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only
groom their personalities
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but
also
set an example for others to follow.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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