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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.8

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. with this statement. v. 8
Undoubtedly, advertisement plays a vital role for customers to get information about any product. However, few companies are using improper methods for promoting their items which is not good for society. I completely agree with mentioned statement that some of the commercials use inappropriate ways of promotion. I will discuss all my points in the upcoming paragraphs. There are several broadcasters which are spreading false information of their useless products to the receivers. owing to the influence many people buy those items which are totally unworthy. For instance, most advertisers use famous celebrities to promote their waste products because many people follow the celebrities. Consequently, customers follow their superstars instead of quality of the products which they are buying. As well as, if anyone want to buy any product with the help of advertisements then they should check all the features and specifications from the internet because many advertisements give false information about their items. Thus, people have to be active before purchasing anything. Furthermore, there are numerous wrong ways which are using by junk food advertisers. Many fast food chains are attracting children with offers or free toys. For example, Hindustan times conducted a survey has proved that fast food consumption leads to health problems including obesity among puplis. Therfore, the government should control these kind of advertisement or ban them entirely. If high authority will take step about unworthy commercials then it can be lead positive impacts. In addition, many advertisement companies are selling their products with very expensive prices. Owing to many children has disturbed their homes financial conditions. In conclusion although commercial plays a key role in promoting products but false and misleading advertisements should be banned. In addition, the government can take strict action for controlling unethical commercials with the intention of awareness about quality.
Undoubtedly
,
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advertisement
plays a vital role for customers to
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get
information about any
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product
.
However
, few
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companies
are using improper methods for promoting their items which is not
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good
for society. I completely
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agree
with mentioned statement that
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some of the
commercials
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use
inappropriate ways of promotion. I will discuss all my points in the upcoming paragraphs.

There are several broadcasters which are spreading false information of their useless
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products
to the receivers.
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owing
to the influence
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many
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people
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buy
those items which are
totally
unworthy.
For instance
, most advertisers
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use
Consider using "celebrities".
famous celebrities
to promote their waste
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products
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because
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many
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people
follow the celebrities.
Consequently
, customers follow their superstars
instead
of quality of the
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products
which they are buying.
As well
as, if anyone
The pronoun 'anyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wants", "wanted".
want
to
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buy
any
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product
with the
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help
of
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advertisements
then they should
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check
all the features and specifications from the internet
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because
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many
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advertisements
give false information about their items.
Thus
,
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people
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have to
be active
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before
purchasing anything.

Furthermore
, there are numerous
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wrong
ways which are using by junk food advertisers.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
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fast
food chains are attracting children with offers or free toys.
For example
, Hindustan times conducted a survey has proved that
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fast
food consumption leads to health problems including obesity among
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puplis
.
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Therfore
, the
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government
should control
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of
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advertisement
or ban them
entirely
. If high authority will take step about unworthy commercials then it can be lead
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positive
impacts.
In addition
,
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many
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advertisement
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are selling their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
expensive prices. Owing to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
children has disturbed their homes financial conditions.

In conclusion
although
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commercial
plays a key role in promoting
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products
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but
false and misleading
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advertisements
should
be banned
.
In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can take strict action for controlling unethical commercials with the intention of awareness about quality.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. with this statement. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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