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Question 1 Students study in a variety of ways Explain how your study habits are different from those of other students you know v.1

Question 1 Students study in a variety of ways Explain how your study habits are different from those of other students you know v. 1
It is true that we are increasingly surrounded by advertising companies that want to sell us their products. To some extent I agree that advertising has an impact on sales, but I would also argue that we do need most of the goods that we buy. Advertisements can certainly tempt people to buy products that they might not other wise want. A good example could be the mobile phone. Every year people can be seen queuing to buy the latest models, even when they already have a perfectly good phone that does not need replacing. Perhaps it is the influence of marketing that leads us to make these kinds of decisions; we want to stay up to date with the latest fashions or own the newest high-status device. The high sales of the iPhone seem to support this idea. On the other hand, I believe that most people do not buy products because of the advertising alone. There are other good reasons why we make these choices, and there must be some kind of need before a person makes a purchase. New versions of products almost always have improved features that buyers may want. A new car, for example, may have greatly improved safety features, or it may be more economical to run, or it may pollute less. A new phone may allow the user to communicate more quickly or effectively, thus enhancing their quality of life. In conclusion, while advertising obviously influences our buying behaviour, I do not agree that people make decisions that go against their real needs
It is true that we are
increasingly
surrounded by advertising
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companies
that
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want
to sell us their
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products
. To
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some
extent I
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agree
that advertising has an impact on sales,
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but
I would
also
argue that we do
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need
most of the
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goods
that we
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buy
.

Advertisements can
certainly
tempt
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people
to
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buy
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products
that they might not
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other wise
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want
. A
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good
example could be the mobile phone. Every year
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people
can be
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seen
queuing to
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buy
the latest models, even when they already have a
perfectly
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good
phone that does not
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need
replacing. Perhaps it is the influence of marketing that leads us to
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make
these kinds of decisions; we
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want
to stay up to date with the latest fashions or
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own
the newest high-status device. The high sales of the iPhone seem to support this
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idea
.

On the other hand
, I believe that most
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people
do not
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buy
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products
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because
of the advertising alone. There are other
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good
reasons why we
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make
these choices, and there
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must
be
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some
kind of
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need
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before
a person
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makes
a
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purchase
. New versions of
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products
almost always have
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improved
features that buyers may
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want
. A new car,
for example
, may have
greatly
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improved
safety features, or it may be more economical to run, or it may pollute less. A new phone may
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allow
the user to communicate more
quickly
or
effectively
,
thus
enhancing their quality of life.

In conclusion
, while advertising
obviously
influences our buying
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behaviour
, I do not
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agree
that
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people
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make
decisions that go against their real
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needs
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Question 1 Students study in a variety of ways Explain how your study habits are different from those of other students you know v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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