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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the bestteachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.100

Parents are the bestteachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 100
Owing to an ongoing debate with regards to which is the better option in eating a home cooked meal and eating out in restaurants and canteens. While some believe that eating out is not a bad idea, I am of the view that having a family meal at home should be encouraged. Firstly, meal times are always seen as the ideal moment for bonding in a family as it tends to bring every member of the family to the table. Moreover, not only does it afford couples the opportunity to observe one another, it gives the same opportunity for parents to do same to their children and vice versa without fear of restraints. Furthermore, in a research conducted by a team of social workers, it was observed that children tend to relate most with their parents at meal times where they give a recap of how their day at school went or a new friend they made et al. Another point to consider is that cooking meals at home not only saves cost, it affords children in the family the opportunity to be domesticated as they could easily be involved in the preparation of the meal. This also gives them the chance to learn a thing or two about fixing a type of food. In addition, home cooked meals minimises the risk of one ingesting meals prepared under uncertain health conditions as one is in total control of the fixing of the family meal from start to finish. In conclusion, meal times are seen to congregational moments for any family and thus should be made memorable. Eating out does not totally afford this “free air” and thus be discouraged in all its shades and manifestations.
Owing to an ongoing debate
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
which is the better option in
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eating
a home cooked
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meal
and
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eating
out in restaurants and canteens. While
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some
believe that
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eating
out is not a
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bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, I am of the view that having a
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family
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meal
at home should
be encouraged
.

Firstly
,
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meal
times are always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as the ideal moment for bonding in a
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family
as it tends to bring every member of the
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family
to the table.
Moreover
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
does it afford couples the opportunity to observe one another, it gives the same opportunity for parents to do same to their children and vice versa without fear of restraints.
Furthermore
, in
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "research".
a research
conducted by a team of social workers, it
was observed
that children tend to relate most with their parents at
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meal
It is better to use 'times' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "times when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')
times where
they give a recap of how their day at school went or a new friend they made et al.

Another point to consider is that cooking
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meals
at home not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
saves cost, it affords children in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
the opportunity to
be domesticated
as they could
easily
be involved
in the preparation of the
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meal
. This
also
gives them the chance to learn a thing or two about fixing a type of food.
In addition
, home cooked
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meals
Possible spelling mistake. 'minimises' is British English.
minimises
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of one ingesting
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meals
prepared under uncertain health conditions as one is in total control of the fixing of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to finish.

In conclusion
,
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meal
times are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
to congregational moments for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
and
thus
should
be made
memorable.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Eating
out does not
totally
afford this “free air” and
thus
be discouraged
in all its shades and manifestations.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Parents are the bestteachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 100

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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